Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Begin with a clear direct answer and use the past tense consistently because the question refers to your childhood. Avoid repeating the same idea, and correct the sentence structure: say “when my parents went for a morning or evening walk” instead of “when they for a morning walk.” Add one specific detail about the bicycle or a memorable experience to make the answer more natural and effective.

예시: Yes, I had a small blue bicycle when I was a child. I used to ride it with my parents when they went for a morning or evening walk. I really loved it because it was my first bicycle, and I still keep it in the storage room at the back of our house.

제안: Give a clear reason and organize your ideas logically. Avoid confusing and repeated phrases such as “riding a bicycle riding a bike,” and distinguish between bicycles and motorbikes. Use linking words such as “especially” and “because,” and provide a specific example, such as young people using bikes for exercise, leisure, or short journeys. Finish your answer with a complete sentence rather than leaving it unfinished.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among teenagers and young adults. Many people ride bicycles for exercise or use motorbikes to travel to nearby places and explore the mountains. For example, cycling groups often go hiking or sightseeing at weekends instead of taking a train or another form of public transport.

× Yes, I have a little bicycle.

✓ Yes, I had a little bicycle.

The question asks about a possession during your childhood, so the past tense had is needed instead of the present tense have.

× When I was a child I used to ride on it with my parents when they for a morning walk and when they go for evening walk.

✓ When I was a child, I used to ride it with my parents when they went for a morning walk and when they went for an evening walk.

The clause when they for a morning walk is incomplete because it is missing the verb went. The sentence also needs clearer clause structure. Use complete clauses after when.

× When I was a child I used to ride on it with my parents when they for a morning walk and when they go for evening walk.

✓ When I was a child, I used to ride it with my parents when they went for a morning walk and when they went for an evening walk.

The sentence describes repeated actions in the past. Therefore, go should be changed to went. The verb used to already expresses a past habit for ride.

× When I was a child I used to ride on it with my parents when they for a morning walk and when they go for evening walk.

✓ When I was a child, I used to ride it with my parents when they went for a morning walk and when they went for an evening walk.

Singular countable nouns need articles. Use a before morning walk and an before evening walk because evening begins with a vowel sound.

× I like it most I think I know I also have it in my storage at the back of our house.

✓ I liked it very much, I think. I know that I still have it in storage at the back of our house.

The original sentence joins several independent ideas without suitable punctuation or conjunctions. Dividing it into two sentences makes the meaning clear. The clause I know that I still have it is also structurally complete.

× I like it most I think I know I also have it in my storage at the back of our house.

✓ I liked it very much, I think. I know that I still have it in storage at the back of our house.

Because you are talking about your childhood bike and your feelings about it at that time, liked is more appropriate than the present-tense verb like.

× I like it most I think I know I also have it in my storage at the back of our house.

✓ I liked it very much, I think. I know that I still have it in storage at the back of our house.

The natural expression is in storage, not in my storage, when referring to an item that is being kept somewhere. Use in storage to describe this situation.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because now teenagers have most of them care about riding a bicycle riding a bike in motorbikes in mountains or go for hiking hiking in the mountains.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many teenagers enjoy riding bicycles or motorbikes in the mountains or going hiking there.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and repeated phrases, such as have most of them care about and hiking hiking. The corrected version uses a clear subject and the parallel structure riding or going.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because now teenagers have most of them care about riding a bicycle riding a bike in motorbikes in mountains or go for hiking hiking in the mountains.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many teenagers enjoy riding bicycles or motorbikes in the mountains or going hiking there.

After enjoy, use a verb in the -ing form. For parallel structure, use riding and going together: enjoy riding ... or going hiking.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because now teenagers have most of them care about riding a bicycle riding a bike in motorbikes in mountains or go for hiking hiking in the mountains.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many teenagers enjoy riding bicycles or motorbikes in the mountains or going hiking there.

The plural noun mountains needs the definite article the when referring to a particular geographical area. The corrected sentence also uses natural plural nouns, bicycles and motorbikes, for general statements.

× That's why they just want to travel on with their bikes not on any means of transport like train or

✓ That's why they want to travel by bike rather than by other means of transport, such as trains.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains the unclear phrase travel on with their bikes. The corrected sentence uses the complete comparison structure rather than and finishes the idea clearly.

× That's why they just want to travel on with their bikes not on any means of transport like train or

✓ That's why they want to travel by bike rather than by other means of transport, such as trains.

When a singular countable noun is used as an example, it normally needs an article, as in a train. In this correction, the plural noun trains is used to make a general statement, so no article is needed.