Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and then add one or two specific details. However, avoid repetition and incorrect generalizations such as “every child often had.” Use the past tense consistently: “had,” “could,” and “was.” Also correct the linking phrase “beside that” to “besides that” or “in addition.” Say “it is also a good way to exercise,” not “it also a good way for them to do exercise.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood and to my friends’ houses because it was convenient and enjoyable. Besides that, cycling was a great way to exercise and spend time outdoors.

제안: Give a clearer overall answer first, and support it with a specific example or reason. The response focuses only on elderly people, so mention other common users if appropriate. Correct the grammar in “they are often have” to “they often have,” and “it also very beneficial” to “it is also very beneficial.” Use “burn extra calories,” not “burn the exception calories,” and reduce fillers such as “uh” and “umm.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students, commuters, and older people. Many elderly people cycle in parks or around their neighborhoods because they have more free time and want to stay healthy. In addition, cycling helps people burn extra calories and is an inexpensive way to travel.

× I think every, every choice, uh, often had a bicycle when they was a kid because it's very convenient.

✓ I think every, every choice, uh, often had a bicycle when they were a kid because it's very convenient.

The pronoun they takes the plural verb were, even when they refers to one person in a general statement. Therefore, was should be changed to were.

× They can go around the neighborhoods or hang out with their friends.

✓ They could go around the neighborhoods or hang out with their friends.

The answer refers to the student's childhood, so the past form of can, which is could, is more appropriate for describing what children were able to do in the past.

× And beside that it also a good way for them to do exercise.

✓ And besides that, it also a good way for them to do exercise.

Besides that is the correct expression for adding another point. Beside usually means next to something physically, so it is not appropriate in this context.

× And beside that it also a good way for them to do exercise.

✓ And besides that, it is also a good way for them to do exercise.

The sentence needs the linking verb is after it. The structure it also a good way is incomplete because a singular subject requires is before the adjective phrase.

× They are often have more free time so they umm, they ride a bike as a way to do more, uh, to do exercise.

✓ They often have more free time, so they, umm, ride a bike as a way to do more, uh, to do exercise.

Have is already the main present-tense verb, so it cannot be used after are in this structure. Remove are and place often before have: they often have.

× It also very beneficial for their well-being because they can burn the exception calories.

✓ It is also very beneficial for their well-being because they can burn the exception calories.

The sentence requires the linking verb is between the subject it and the adjective beneficial. Without is, the sentence does not contain a complete verb phrase.