Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and avoid saying “one bike with me”; say “I had a bike” instead. There is also a timing problem: entering your first year of college does not usually mean you were a child, so clarify when you received it. Use natural phrases such as “a red Royal Enfield Meteor 350” and “my parents gave it to me.” Keep the answer to two or three well-connected sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike, although I got it when I started my first year of college rather than when I was very young. It was a red Royal Enfield Meteor 350, which my parents gave me as a present. I was really excited because it gave me more freedom to travel around.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Use “in India” rather than “in our country India,” and replace “is popularly growing” with “is becoming increasingly popular.” The phrase “go to bike rides” should be “go on bike rides.” Avoid the incomplete linking phrase “even though”; use “I’m also interested in it” or explain why you enjoy biking.

예시: Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly popular in India. Many people go on rides at weekends or in their free time because biking is an enjoyable way to travel and explore nearby places. I’m also interested in biking, especially because it allows me to spend time outdoors and meet other riders.

× Yeah, I had one bike with me and it was Royal Enfield Meteor 350 which was of red colour and it was gifted by my parents at when I entered my first year in college.

✓ Yeah, I had a red Royal Enfield Meteor 350, which my parents gave me when I started my first year of college.

The noun phrase Royal Enfield Meteor 350 is a singular countable noun, so it needs the indefinite article a. The phrase one bike is grammatically possible, but a bike is more natural when simply mentioning one item.

× Yeah, biking culture is popularly growing in our country India and people nowadays go to bike rides on weekends or in their free time and even though I am also quite interested in biking culture.

✓ Yeah, biking culture is becoming increasingly popular in India, and people nowadays go on bike rides on weekends or in their free time. I am also quite interested in biking culture.

Popularly does not correctly modify growing in this context. The natural expression is becoming increasingly popular. Increasingly is an adverb that shows the growing degree of popularity.

× Yeah, I had one bike with me and it was Royal Enfield Meteor 350 which was of red colour and it was gifted by my parents at when I entered my first year in college.

✓ Yeah, I had a red Royal Enfield Meteor 350, which my parents gave me when I started my first year of college.

The preposition at cannot be used before the conjunction when. Use when directly to introduce the time clause. Also, the natural expression is go on a bike ride, not go to a bike ride.

× Yeah, biking culture is popularly growing in our country India and people nowadays go to bike rides on weekends or in their free time and even though I am also quite interested in biking culture.

✓ Yeah, biking culture is becoming increasingly popular in India, and people nowadays go on bike rides on weekends or in their free time. I am also quite interested in biking culture.

Even though introduces a dependent clause that must be connected to an independent clause showing contrast. No contrast is intended here, so even though should be removed. A new sentence correctly expresses the final idea.