Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly, then add one specific detail about how or where you used your bike. Avoid repeating “surroundings,” “environment,” and “area,” and use a more natural expression such as “ride around my neighborhood.” Also, “when I was seven or eight” is smoother than “when I was 7-8 years old.”

예시: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was about seven or eight years old, and I often rode it around my neighborhood for fun. Sometimes, I cycled to a nearby park with my friends.

제안: Give a clear general answer first because the question asks about your country, not only ten-year-old children. Improve grammar by using “bikes are used,” “exercise,” and “children’s health.” Use a linking word such as “because” to connect your reason, and add a specific example, such as children riding in parks or people cycling to work.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. Many children ride them in parks or around their neighborhoods because cycling is both enjoyable and good exercise. In some cities, adults also use bicycles to commute and avoid traffic.

× Like when I was 7-8 years old, I used to have a bike which I used to roam around my surroundings, my environment, my area for fun.

✓ When I was 7 or 8 years old, I used to ride my bike around my neighborhood for fun.

We normally say ride a bike, not roam a bike. The preposition around is acceptable with ride when describing movement through an area. Neighborhood is also a more natural word than the repetitive sequence surroundings, environment, and area.

× Yeah, I think for kids around the age of 10, the bikes are very popular as it is used for entertainment purposes or for having fun and to do lots of exercises which are really good for a kids health.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are very popular among children around the age of 10 because they are used for entertainment, fun, and exercise, which is really good for children's health.

Use bikes without the definite article when speaking about bikes in general. The definite article the is used for a specific group of bikes, not for a general category.

× Yeah, I think for kids around the age of 10, the bikes are very popular as it is used for entertainment purposes or for having fun and to do lots of exercises which are really good for a kids health.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are very popular among children around the age of 10 because they are used for entertainment, fun, and exercise, which is really good for children's health.

The noun bikes is plural, so it must be replaced by the plural pronoun they, not the singular pronoun it. The corresponding verb must also be plural: they are used.

× Yeah, I think for kids around the age of 10, the bikes are very popular as it is used for entertainment purposes or for having fun and to do lots of exercises which are really good for a kids health.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are very popular among children around the age of 10 because they are used for entertainment, fun, and exercise, which is really good for children's health.

A plural subject requires a plural verb. Since bikes refers to more than one bike, the correct form is they are used, not it is used.

× Yeah, I think for kids around the age of 10, the bikes are very popular as it is used for entertainment purposes or for having fun and to do lots of exercises which are really good for a kids health.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are very popular among children around the age of 10 because they are used for entertainment, fun, and exercise, which is really good for children's health.

The phrase a kids health is incorrect because a cannot be used before the plural possessive noun kids. Use children's health or kids' health. Children's is the possessive form of children.

× Yeah, I think for kids around the age of 10, the bikes are very popular as it is used for entertainment purposes or for having fun and to do lots of exercises which are really good for a kids health.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are very popular among children around the age of 10 because they are used for entertainment, fun, and exercise, which is really good for children's health.

The original sentence uses an uneven structure: for entertainment purposes, for having fun, and to do lots of exercises. Items joined by and should have a parallel grammatical form. Entertainment, fun, and exercise are parallel nouns, so the sentence is clearer and more grammatical.