Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct, natural, and well supported with a specific personal memory. However, because you are describing a past situation, use the past perfect continuous—“I had been asking”—instead of “I’ve been asking.” Also, say “in the middle of the night” and consider adding a brief detail about how you used the bike to make the answer even more vivid.

예시: Yes, I did. I remember that my dad surprised me with a pink bike in the middle of the night, and I was absolutely thrilled because I had been asking for one for months. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every weekend.

제안: You give a clear opinion and explain the change in popularity, but several phrases are grammatically inaccurate or unnatural. Say “during the pandemic” rather than “in an intern pandemic,” “biking became popular” rather than “biking became a hobby,” and “I don’t see many people using bikes” rather than “use this bike.” The final idea should be expressed as “my country doesn’t have many bike-friendly streets.” Use a linking word such as “although” or “however” to connect the past and present more smoothly.

예시: Bikes became quite popular during the pandemic, when many people took up cycling as a hobby. However, they are less popular now because my country does not have many bike-friendly streets. As a result, people often feel unsafe riding on busy roads.

× I remember my dad surprised me in the middle of the night with a pink bike and I was so thrilled because I've been asking for it for months.

✓ I remember my dad surprised me in the middle of the night with a pink bike, and I was so thrilled because I had been asking for it for months.

The entire story is told in the past. Therefore, the ongoing action of asking must be expressed with the past perfect continuous, had been asking, because it began before the past event of receiving the bike.

× There was a time that it became really popular in an intern pandemic where biking became a hobby.

✓ There was a time when biking became really popular during the COVID-19 pandemic.

When is the appropriate conjunction for referring to a period of time. That is not suitable in this time expression. The revised sentence also avoids the unclear structure where biking became a hobby.

× There was a time that it became really popular in an intern pandemic where biking became a hobby.

✓ There was a time when biking became really popular during the COVID-19 pandemic.

During is the appropriate preposition for an event or period such as a pandemic. In an intern pandemic is incorrect; intern is not the correct word in this context.

× But right now I don't see many people use this bike in my country since it's not very bike friendly streets that we have there.

✓ But right now, I do not see many people using bikes in my country because the streets there are not very bike-friendly.

After see someone in this meaning, the present participle form using is more appropriate for an action that is currently happening or generally observed. The phrase using bikes also expresses the general activity more naturally than use this bike.

× But right now I don't see many people use this bike in my country since it's not very bike friendly streets that we have there.

✓ But right now, I do not see many people using bikes in my country because the streets there are not very bike-friendly.

The answer discusses cycling as a general activity, so the plural noun bikes is more appropriate than this bike, which refers to one specific bicycle.

× But right now I don't see many people use this bike in my country since it's not very bike friendly streets that we have there.

✓ But right now, I do not see many people using bikes in my country because the streets there are not very bike-friendly.

The original sentence combines it is with the plural noun streets, creating an awkward and grammatically incorrect structure. A clearer structure is the streets there are not very bike-friendly. Bike-friendly is a compound adjective and should be hyphenated.

× But right now I don't see many people use this bike in my country since it's not very bike friendly streets that we have there.

✓ But right now, I do not see many people using bikes in my country because the streets there are not very bike-friendly.

Streets is plural, so it must be used with are, not is. The revised sentence uses the correct subject-verb agreement: the streets there are not very bike-friendly.