Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer directly responds to the question and includes specific details about the bikes and how you used them. However, there are several grammar and naturalness problems: use “child-sized” instead of “child size,” “enjoyed” instead of “enjoy,” and “rode” or “used to ride” instead of “used in riding.” Divide the long sentence into two or three shorter sentences and use a linking phrase such as “Later” to make the sequence clearer.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small, yellow, child-sized bike, and I enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood. Later, I had a red bike that I used to ride with my friends.

제안: You give relevant reasons, including affordability, exercise, and environmental benefits. To sound more natural, say “exercise” rather than “exercises,” and replace “they don’t use fuel or petrol” with “they do not require fuel.” The final sentence, “I would say so it’s quite common,” is awkward and repetitive; use “Overall, cycling is quite common.” Connect the reasons more smoothly with “In addition” or “Moreover.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them because they are more affordable than cars and do not require fuel. In addition, cycling is a convenient form of exercise, especially for short journeys. Overall, bikes are a common means of transport.

× Yes, I had a bike, a small child size yellow bike which I enjoy riding through the neighborhood and later on I had a red bike which I used in riding alongside my friends.

✓ Yes, I had a small, child-sized yellow bike, which I enjoyed riding through the neighborhood, and later on I had a red bike, which I used to ride alongside my friends.

Adjectives should follow a natural order: size, age or type, and color. Also, child-sized should be written as a compound adjective with a hyphen. A more natural phrase is a small, child-sized yellow bike.

× which I enjoy riding through the neighborhood

✓ which I enjoyed riding through the neighborhood

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should consistently use the past tense. Enjoyed is the past-tense form of enjoy.

× which I used in riding alongside my friends

✓ which I used to ride alongside my friends

The expression used to + base verb describes a past habit or repeated action. Therefore, used to ride is correct, not used in riding.

× bikes are used for exercises

✓ bikes are used for exercise

Exercise is usually an uncountable noun when it refers to physical activity in general, so it should not be made plural in this sentence.

× I would say so it's quite common.

✓ I would say that bikes are quite common.

The phrase I would say so is incorrectly connected to it's in this sentence. Use I would say that followed by a complete clause. Also, bikes is plural, so the sentence should use are rather than is.