Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: You answer the question directly and provide relevant, specific details about who taught you and why you enjoyed cycling. However, the second sentence is too long and contains a comma splice. Use a full stop or a linking word to separate the ideas. Also, replace “after I finished my school” with the more natural phrase “after school” or “after I finished school.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father and grandfather taught me how to ride, and I used to cycle around the city after school. It was one of my favorite activities because I enjoyed the sense of freedom and exploring my surroundings.

제안: You give a clear opinion and a relevant contrast, but the phrase “there is no infrastructure there is no developed infrastructure” is repetitive and grammatically incorrect. State the main idea first, then explain that cycling infrastructure is limited. Add one specific detail, such as a lack of bike lanes or safety concerns, to make the answer more developed.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who want to exercise. However, cycling infrastructure is still underdeveloped, so there are not enough bike lanes, and many people are concerned about safety when riding on busy roads.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father and my grandfather taught me how to ride and I used to cycle around the city every day after I finished my school, it was one of my favorite activities because I loved feeling free and exploring the surroundings.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father and grandfather taught me how to ride, and I used to cycle around the city every day after I finished school. It was one of my favorite activities because I loved feeling free and exploring the surroundings.

The original sentence contains a comma splice: two independent clauses, I used to cycle... and it was..., are incorrectly joined with only a comma. Separate them with a full stop, or join them with a suitable conjunction. Also, finished school is the natural expression when referring to completing the school day or school attendance. To improve clarity, avoid joining too many ideas in one sentence.

× Yes, I think that bikes are popular in my country, but there is no infrastructure there is no developed infrastructure for riding a bike.

✓ Yes, I think that bikes are popular in my country, but there is no developed infrastructure for cycling.

The phrase there is no infrastructure is repeated and is incorrectly connected to the following clause without punctuation or a conjunction. This creates a sentence-structure error. Remove the repetition and express the idea in one complete, logically connected clause.