Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ в целом раскрывает тему и содержит личные детали, но есть несколько серьёзных грамматических ошибок и неестественных выражений. Используйте правильную конструкцию прошедшего времени: “My dad gave it to me” вместо “my dad it gives me”. Для велосипеда нужен глагол “ride”, а не “write”. Также сформулируйте второе предложение естественно: “Riding it made me feel happy and relaxed.” Уберите повтор “write, write” и заминку “uh”, чтобы ответ звучал более уверенно и бегло.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad gave it to me for my birthday, and I used to ride it almost every day. Riding it made me feel happy and relaxed, especially when I explored my neighborhood.

제안: Ответ напрямую отвечает на вопрос, но он слишком короткий и требует грамматической корректировки. Вместо “I think no” скажите “I don’t think so”, а вместо “more faster” используйте только “faster”, поскольку сравнительная форма уже содержит значение сравнения. Добавьте конкретную причину или пример, например загруженность дорог, отсутствие велосипедных дорожек или популярность автомобилей. Свяжите идеи с помощью “because” или “although”, чтобы ответ был более логичным и содержательным.

예시: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer to drive cars, which are faster and more convenient for long distances. In addition, many cities don’t have safe bike lanes, so people may feel uncomfortable cycling on busy roads.

× Yes, I had once and my dad it gives me for my birthday and I used to, uh, write, write back almost every day.

✓ Yes, I had one, and my dad gave it to me for my birthday. I used to ride it almost every day.

The word 'once' is an adverb meaning 'one time'; it cannot replace the object of the verb 'had'. Use the pronoun 'one' to refer to a bike. Also, because the story is about childhood, use the past form 'gave'. The natural verb for using a bike is 'ride', not 'write'.

× Yes, I had once and my dad it gives me for my birthday and I used to, uh, write, write back almost every day.

✓ Yes, I had one, and my dad gave it to me for my birthday. I used to ride it almost every day.

The pronoun 'it' must come after the verb and preposition in the phrase 'gave it to me'. The structure 'my dad it gives me' has an incorrect pronoun position. A useful pattern is subject + verb + object + to + recipient: 'My dad gave it to me.'

× Yes, I had once and my dad it gives me for my birthday and I used to, uh, write, write back almost every day.

✓ Yes, I had one, and my dad gave it to me for my birthday. I used to ride it almost every day.

The question asks about a past period, so the past-tense form 'gave' is required instead of 'gives'. After 'used to', use the base form of the verb: 'used to ride'.

× It how it makes me feel happy and relaxed.

✓ It made me feel happy and relaxed.

The original sentence contains an incorrect combination of sentence structures: 'It how...' and 'it makes...'. Use the structure subject + make + object + adjective: 'It made me feel happy and relaxed.' Since the speaker is describing a childhood experience, 'made' is more suitable than 'makes'.

× I think no, because the cars are more faster.

✓ I don't think so, because cars are faster.

The adjective 'fast' forms its comparative with the suffix '-er', so use 'faster', not 'more faster'. Do not use 'more' together with an '-er' comparative. Also, 'I don't think so' is the natural way to disagree with a yes-or-no question.