Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly, then add the specific memory and its result. Use “on my seventh birthday” rather than “during my 7th birthday,” and say “training wheels,” not “training rules.” Also, “I had to learn” sounds more natural and less negative than “I was forced to learn.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me on my seventh birthday, but it didn’t have training wheels. As a result, I had to learn how to ride it on my own, which was difficult at first but quite rewarding.

제안: Begin with a clear overall answer and then compare the countryside with cities. Avoid fillers such as “like,” informal “’cause,” and the repetition of “in the city.” Use “bikes” consistently, and connect your ideas with words such as “however” and “because.”

예시: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially in rural areas where there is less traffic and people often use them for short journeys. However, they are less common in big cities because the roads are usually crowded with cars, making cycling less safe.

× I remember my parents gave it to me during my 7th birthday and it had no training rules so I was forced to learn how to ride a bike without training wheels.

✓ I remember my parents gave it to me on my 7th birthday and it had no training rules, so I was forced to learn how to ride a bike without training wheels.

Use on with a specific day or date, including a birthday: on my 7th birthday. Use during for a period of time, such as during my childhood or during the summer.

× There's just too much traffic, cars and it's just quite dangerous to ride a bike in the city.

✓ There is just too much traffic, and there are too many cars, so it is quite dangerous to ride a bike in the city.

In there-be constructions, the verb should agree with the noun that follows it. Traffic is uncountable and takes there is, while cars is plural and takes there are. The conjunction and is also needed to connect the two noun phrases clearly.

× There's just too much traffic, cars and it's just quite dangerous to ride a bike in the city.

✓ There is just too much traffic, and there are too many cars, so it is quite dangerous to ride a bike in the city.

Use much with uncountable nouns, such as traffic, and many with countable plural nouns, such as cars. Therefore, too much traffic and too many cars are the correct combinations.