Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question more directly and use natural phrasing. “I didn't experience having a bike” is grammatically understandable but unnatural; say “I didn't have a bike.” Add a brief reason or alternative childhood activity to provide supporting detail.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one at the time, so I usually played outdoor games with my friends instead.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence first, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines.” Avoid the unnatural phrase “As what I have observed I agree” and the unnecessary wording “my country which is the Philippines.” Use linking words such as “because” or “for example” to organize your explanation, and finish the incomplete sentence. Include a specific reason or example, such as cycling for exercise, transportation, or recreation.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. For example, I often see children and adults riding them in our streets and parks. Many people use bikes for exercise, while others ride them because they are an affordable way to travel.

× As what I have observed, I agree that bikes are popular in my country which is the Philippines because everywhere in our streets, I can see children having bikes or even adults.

✓ From what I have observed, I agree that bikes are popular in my country, the Philippines, because I can see children and even adults riding bikes everywhere on our streets.

The expression is from what I have observed, not as what I have observed. The preposition on is more appropriate than in when referring to streets. In addition, riding bikes creates a clearer and more natural expression than having bikes in this context.

× I can see children having bikes or even adults. They're fond of

✓ I can see children and even adults riding bikes everywhere on our streets. They are fond of riding them.

The phrase children having bikes or even adults is not correctly structured because the two groups are not connected in a parallel way. Use children and even adults riding bikes. The phrase They are fond of is incomplete because fond of must be followed by a noun or a gerund. Here, riding them completes the sentence.