Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly, then add one or two complete supporting details. Use the past tense consistently: say “I took” and “I went,” not “I take” and “I go.” The phrase “take it to a cycle to school” is unnatural; say “I rode it to school.” Also, avoid ending abruptly and explain how often or why you used the bicycle. Keep the answer to a maximum of five complete sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it to school because my school was nearby. I also used it to visit my friends in the evenings, so it was a convenient way to get around.

제안: Give a clear answer about your country, rather than limiting your response to your community. Add specific examples and complete the contrast about older people. Use accurate vocabulary: “office workers” instead of “dofies workers,” and “educational institutions” or “schools” instead of “the education institute.” Use linking words such as “for example” and “however” to organize your ideas, and avoid repetition and unfinished phrases.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in smaller cities. For example, many students and office workers ride them to school or work because bikes are affordable and convenient for short journeys. However, older people tend to use motorbikes or public transportation instead.

× I used it for short distances then in my school sometimes I take it to a cycle to school because it was nearby and most of the evening I go to my friend's house by my

✓ I used it for short distances, and sometimes I rode it to school because it was nearby. In the evening, I usually went to my friend's house by bike.

The question asks about your childhood, so you should use the past tense consistently. Use rode instead of take and went instead of go. Also, by bike is the natural expression for describing transportation.

× I used it for short distances then in my school sometimes I take it to a cycle to school because it was nearby and most of the evening I go to my friend's house by my

✓ I used it for short distances, and sometimes I rode it to school because it was nearby. In the evening, I usually went to my friend's house by bike.

The prepositions and transportation expressions are incorrect or incomplete. Say rode it to school, not take it to a cycle to school, and say by bike rather than by my. By bike is the standard prepositional phrase.

× I used it for short distances then in my school sometimes I take it to a cycle to school because it was nearby and most of the evening I go to my friend's house by my

✓ I used it for short distances, and sometimes I rode it to school because it was nearby. In the evening, I usually went to my friend's house by bike.

The original sentence joins several independent ideas without clear coordination. Use and to connect related ideas and separate the longer information into two sentences for clarity.

× I used it for short distances then in my school sometimes I take it to a cycle to school because it was nearby and most of the evening I go to my friend's house by my

✓ I used it for short distances, and sometimes I rode it to school because it was nearby. In the evening, I usually went to my friend's house by bike.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence and ends with an incomplete phrase, by my. Organize the information into two complete sentences, each with a clear subject and verb.

× For instance many students and dofies workers ride bikes to their workplace or the education institute.

✓ For instance, many students and office workers ride bikes to their workplaces or educational institutions.

Because the sentence refers to many students and workers, the destinations should normally be plural: workplaces and educational institutions. Also, office workers is the correct noun phrase; dofies workers is not grammatically or lexically correct.

× For instance many students and dofies workers ride bikes to their workplace or the education institute.

✓ For instance, many students and office workers ride bikes to their workplaces or educational institutions.

The definite article the is used for a specific, previously identified place. Here, you are speaking generally, so no article is needed before educational institutions. Use the plural form to describe institutions in general.

× Though the parents are, though the elder people are so

✓ However, parents and older people are less likely to ride bikes.

The original phrase is incomplete and repeats though without finishing the comparison or idea. Use a complete sentence with a subject, a verb, and a clear complement. Older people is also more natural than elder people in this context.