Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答の主旨は伝わりますが、過去の経験について話しているため、現在形の「it's」ではなく過去形の「it was」を使いましょう。また、「go to somewhere」は不自然なので「go somewhere」と言い、「go to supermarket」には冠詞を加えて「go to the supermarket」とします。同じ内容の繰り返しを避け、「For example」などのつなぎ言葉を使って、具体的な場面を一つ加えると、より自然で効果的な回答になります。

예시: Yes, I did. I often rode my bike because it was a convenient way to get around. For example, I used to cycle to the supermarket near my house when I needed to buy snacks or drinks.

제안: 「Depend」ではなく「It depends」と始め、地域による違いを明確な2つの文に分けて説明しましょう。「pop so popular」は「quite popular」に、「there has a wide range of the」は意味が不明確なので、東京では「many other forms of transport are available」のように具体的に言い換える必要があります。また、「but」と「however」は同時に使わず、どちらか一つだけを使いましょう。故郷と東京を比較し、理由や具体例を加えると、内容のつながりが改善します。

예시: It depends on the area. Bikes are quite popular among children in my hometown because the roads are quiet and the town is relatively small. In Tokyo, however, many people rely on trains because the city is crowded and public transport is very convenient.

× I used to ride a bike because it's convenient to go to somewhere.

✓ I used to ride a bike because it was convenient to go somewhere.

The question asks about your childhood, so the past-tense form was is more appropriate than the present-tense form is. The word somewhere does not need the preposition to before it. Use go somewhere, not go to somewhere.

× If you wanna go to supermarket, I used to ride a bike.

✓ If I wanted to go to a supermarket, I used to ride a bike.

Because you are describing a past habit, wanted is more consistent than the present-tense form want in this context. The singular countable noun supermarket needs an article, so use a supermarket. In formal speaking, use wanted to instead of the informal wanna.

× Depend on the area, my hometown is pop so popular for young children, but however in Tokyo, like a big city umm there has a a wide range of the.

✓ It depends on the area. My hometown is very popular among young children, but in Tokyo, a big city, there is a wide range of bicycles.

The phrase should be It depends on the area because the subject it and the third-person singular verb depends are required. Use popular among people, not popular for people, when describing popularity. Pop and so popular should not be used together; use very popular. Do not use but and however together because they express the same contrast. For existence, use there is with the singular noun range, not there has. The noun range needs the article a, and the unnecessary final the should be removed. Breaking the long run-on sentence into two sentences also makes the answer clearer.