Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ в целом понятен, но есть значительные проблемы с грамматикой, повторениями и естественностью выражений. Используйте прошедшее время: “I didn’t have a bike” и “my parents thought”. Вместо неясной фразы “many people scared about catastrophe of” объясните конкретную причину, например опасность дорожного движения или большое количество машин. Ответ лучше построить так: прямой ответ, причина и короткое уточнение. Избегайте самокоррекций и повторов вроде “think, told” и “and and”.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought it was too dangerous because there was a lot of traffic in our area. They were worried that I might have an accident, so they never bought me one.

제안: Вы дали прямой ответ, но объяснение трудно понять из-за пауз, повторов и неправильного выбора слов. Говорите “cycling is not very popular” вместо “bikers aren’t popular”, так как вопрос относится к популярности велосипедов, а не людей, которые на них ездят. Уточните причину: длинные расстояния, широкие дороги, интенсивное движение или отсутствие велосипедных дорожек. Используйте связку “because” и конкретное завершение; “huge car” следует заменить на “large cars” или “heavy traffic”.

예시: No, I don’t think cycling is very popular in my country. Many people travel long distances, and the roads are usually busy with large cars. In addition, there aren’t enough bike lanes, so cycling can feel unsafe and inconvenient.

× No, I don't have a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use didn't have instead of don't have.

× When I was a child, my parents thinks, think, told about that.

✓ When I was a child, my parents thought that it would be crazy.

The sentence refers to the past, so the verb think must be changed to its past form, thought. The phrase told about that is not appropriate here; thought that expresses the intended meaning.

× They're scared about me and many people scared about catastrophe of.

✓ They were scared for me, and many people were scared of catastrophes.

Because the speaker is describing the past, they're should be changed to were. The second clause also needs the past-tense verb were.

× They're scared about me and many people scared about catastrophe of.

✓ They were scared for me, and many people were scared of catastrophes.

The plural subject many people requires the plural verb were. A complete clause needs a form of be before the adjective scared.

× They're scared about me and many people scared about catastrophe of.

✓ They were scared for me, and many people were scared of catastrophes.

Use scared for someone when expressing concern about that person's safety. Use scared of something when expressing fear of a danger or event.

× They're scared about me and many people scared about catastrophe of.

✓ They were scared for me, and many people were scared of catastrophes.

The noun catastrophe should be plural because the sentence refers to catastrophes in general. The plural form is also more natural after the general expression many people were scared of.

× because we have uh, so long. Uh, uh, so long. And big, uh, huge car and this is not comfortable for passenger.

✓ because we have such long, big, huge cars, and they are not comfortable for passengers.

Use such before an adjective followed by a noun, as in such long cars. So is normally used before an adjective without a following noun, as in The cars are so long.

× because we have uh, so long. Uh, uh, so long. And big, uh, huge car and this is not comfortable for passenger.

✓ because we have such long, big, huge cars, and they are not comfortable for passengers.

The sentence describes cars and passengers in general, so both nouns should be plural: cars and passengers.

× because we have uh, so long. Uh, uh, so long. And big, uh, huge car and this is not comfortable for passenger.

✓ because we have such long, big, huge cars, and they are not comfortable for passengers.

The pronoun this is singular, but it refers to the plural noun cars. Use they to agree with cars.

× because we have uh, so long. Uh, uh, so long. And big, uh, huge car and this is not comfortable for passenger.

✓ because we have such long, big, huge cars, and they are not comfortable for passengers.

The original contains incomplete fragments and repeated words. Combine the ideas into one complete clause with a subject, verb, and logical conjunction.