Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and use more natural expressions. Replace “taking a bicycle” with “riding a bike,” and change “It help” to “It helped.” You could also add one specific detail, such as where you rode your bike or how often you used it.

예시: Yes, I did. I used to enjoy riding my bike around my neighborhood when I was a child. It was fun and also helped me stay healthy.

제안: Give a clear opinion at the beginning, then explain it with accurate grammar and a complete ending. Say “a bike-sharing system called Daruni,” not “a system for other people which call Daruni.” Avoid repeating “I can rent” and clearly explain why the system makes bikes popular, such as convenience or affordability.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. We have a bike-sharing system called Daruni, so people can rent a bike easily through a mobile app. It is convenient and affordable, especially for short journeys.

× It help my health as well.

✓ It helps my health as well.

The subject it is third-person singular, so the present-tense verb must take the -s form: helps, not help. However, because the surrounding context describes childhood, the more natural correction is It helped my health as well.

× It help my health as well.

✓ It helped my health as well.

The answer discusses the student's childhood, so the verb should be in the past tense. The past form of help is helped. This sentence could also be expressed as It was good for my health as well.

× We have a system for other people which call Daruni.

✓ We have a system called Daruni for other people.

Daruni is the name given to the system, so a passive structure is needed. Use called, or use is called in the longer form: We have a system which is called Daruni. The original form which call incorrectly makes the system perform the action.

× I can rent a byco whenever I want just with the simple app I can rent that every single hour just for

✓ I can rent a bicycle whenever I want using a simple app. I can rent it by the hour.

The expression by the hour is the correct prepositional phrase for describing an hourly rental. Also, using a simple app is more natural than just with the simple app in this context. Remember to use by the hour, not every single hour, when you mean that payment is based on each hour of use.

× I can rent a byco whenever I want just with the simple app I can rent that every single hour just for

✓ I can rent a bicycle whenever I want using a simple app. I can rent it by the hour.

A bicycle is a singular countable object, so it is the appropriate pronoun when referring back to a bicycle. That is not the most natural pronoun in this sentence.

× I can rent a byco whenever I want just with the simple app I can rent that every single hour just for

✓ I can rent a bicycle whenever I want using a simple app. I can rent it by the hour.

Use a before simple app because this is one nonspecific app being mentioned for the first time. The phrase the simple app would suggest that the listener already knows which particular app you mean.

× I can rent a byco whenever I want just with the simple app I can rent that every single hour just for

✓ I can rent a bicycle whenever I want using a simple app. I can rent it by the hour.

The original sentence contains several independent ideas joined without appropriate punctuation or a conjunction, and it ends incomplete with just for. Divide it into two complete sentences and use a clear expression for the rental price or duration.