Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then explain what happened to the bike. Improve grammar by saying “when I was a child,” “my dad bought it for me,” and “my older brother used it until it broke.” Avoid unclear phrases and fillers such as “uh” and “huh.” Use linking words such as “however” or “unfortunately” to connect your details.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad bought it for me because I really wanted one, and it was very cute. However, my older brother used it so often that it eventually broke.

제안: State your opinion clearly and use the correct word “bikes,” not “bodies.” Support your answer with a specific comparison: motorbikes are more popular because they are faster and more convenient for travelling long distances. Correct the grammar in “motorbike are” and avoid repeating “in Vietnam” and using too many fillers.

예시: No, bicycles are not very popular in Vietnam. Motorbikes are much more common because they are faster and more convenient, especially when people need to travel long distances. However, bicycles are still popular for exercise and short trips.

× Yes, I had a bike once I was a child my dad bought to me is very cute.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad bought it for me, and it was very cute.

The original sentence joins several incomplete ideas without proper punctuation or conjunctions. Divide it into two sentences and connect the final ideas with and. This makes the sentence clearer and grammatically complete.

× My dad bought to me a bike.

✓ My dad bought a bike for me.

With the verb buy, use for to indicate the person who receives the thing: buy something for someone. Do not use to in this structure.

× My dad bought a bike to me.

✓ My dad bought it for me.

The object pronoun it correctly refers to the bike, and me is the object of the preposition for. Use object pronouns such as it and me in these positions.

× My dad bought it for me, and it is very cute.

✓ My dad bought it for me, and it was very cute.

The question asks about a past situation, so the description should also use the past tense. Change is to was.

× But my older brother.

✓ But my older brother used it, and it broke later.

My older brother is only a noun phrase and does not contain a complete verb phrase. Add a verb to form a complete sentence. The corrected sentence also expresses the likely intended meaning clearly.

× My older brother used it, and it is broken later.

✓ My older brother used it, and it broke later.

The event happened in the past, so use the past-tense verb broke instead of the present form is. Broke is the simple past form of break.

× I do not think bikes are popular in Vietnam because motorbike are more popular.

✓ I do not think bikes are popular in Vietnam because motorbikes are more popular.

Motorbikes is a plural countable noun because the sentence refers to motorbikes in general. Add the plural ending -s to motorbike.

× Motorbike are more popular.

✓ Motorbikes are more popular.

The plural subject motorbikes correctly takes the plural verb are. The singular noun motorbike would take is.

× Because they can use motorbike to go with their longer.

✓ People can use motorbikes to travel longer distances.

The original clause is incomplete and go with their longer does not express a complete idea. Use a complete subject and verb, and use travel longer distances to express the intended meaning.

× People can use motorbike to travel longer distances.

✓ People can use motorbikes to travel longer distances.

When speaking about motorbikes in general, use the plural form motorbikes. A singular countable noun would require an article, such as a motorbike.