Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct, natural, and grammatically understandable. Improve the sentence by adding commas around the contrasting clause and using the more natural phrase “bought me a bicycle for my twelfth birthday” instead of “did buy me a bicycle on my twelfth birthday.” You could also add one specific detail about how you used the bicycle to make the answer more engaging.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was very young, but my parents bought me one for my twelfth birthday. I was thrilled because I could ride it to school and visit my friends in the neighborhood.

제안: You give a clear opinion and relevant reasons, but the second sentence is a run-on sentence and “practically in heavy traffic” is unnatural. Use a linking word such as “In addition” to connect your ideas, and say “children often cycle to school,” not “cycle to the school.” Be more specific by explaining that bicycles are useful for avoiding traffic and reducing transportation costs.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many adults commute to work by bike because cycling is affordable and helps them avoid heavy traffic. In addition, children often ride their bikes to school, especially when they live nearby.

× Many people commute to work on their own bikes because they are affordable and practically in heavy traffic children often cycle to the school

✓ Many people commute to work on their own bikes because bikes are affordable and practical in heavy traffic. Children often cycle to school.

Practical is an adjective that describes bikes. Practically is an adverb and cannot correctly describe bikes in this sentence. Use practical after the linking verb are to describe the bikes.

× Many people commute to work on their own bikes because they are affordable and practically in heavy traffic children often cycle to the school

✓ Many people commute to work on their own bikes because bikes are affordable and practical in heavy traffic. Children often cycle to school.

When talking about the activity of going to school in general, use school without the definite article. The phrase cycle to school is the natural expression. Use the school only when referring to a particular school that has already been identified.

× Many people commute to work on their own bikes because they are affordable and practically in heavy traffic children often cycle to the school

✓ Many people commute to work on their own bikes because bikes are affordable and practical in heavy traffic. Children often cycle to school.

The original sentence incorrectly joins two separate ideas without suitable punctuation. Use a full stop to separate the two complete sentences. Separating them makes the answer clearer and avoids a run-on sentence.