Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and use accurate, natural expressions. “As I knew children” is incorrect; say “when I was a child.” Also, “I enjoyed” is incomplete, and “I learned it at six years old” should be “I learned to ride it when I was six.” Avoid repeating the same idea with “I liked riding,” “I enjoyed,” and “I still love it.” Add one specific detail about where or why you rode your bike.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I learned to ride it when I was about six. I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends. I still have a bike now because I enjoy cycling and find it a convenient way to get around.

제안: Give a more direct answer about your own country before making a global comparison. The phrase “all around the world” is too general, and cycling is better described as a popular activity or form of transport rather than simply one of the most common sports. Use a linking word such as “because” or “as a result” to explain your view, and provide a specific example related to Russia, such as cycling in parks or in large cities.

예시: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in Russia, especially among children and people who enjoy outdoor activities. Cycling is relatively inexpensive, and it is also a healthy way to travel. However, it is more common in parks and during the warmer months because many cities do not have enough dedicated bike lanes.

× Of course I had a bike as I knew children.

✓ Of course, I had a bike when I was a child.

The clause 'as I knew children' is not structured correctly for the intended meaning. Use 'when I was a child' to refer to a time in the past. Also, 'child' should be singular because the speaker is referring to themselves.

× I enjoyed.

✓ I enjoyed riding my bike.

The verb 'enjoy' normally needs a direct object. When the object is an activity, use a gerund: 'enjoyed riding.'

× I learned it at six years old and I still do love it.

✓ I learned to ride it when I was six years old, and I still love it.

Use 'when I was six years old' rather than 'at six years old' to express the speaker's age at that time. The expression 'still do love it' is grammatically possible for emphasis, but 'still love it' is the natural form here.

× I think that bikes are popular all around the world, not only in Russia or England.

✓ I think that bikes are popular all around the world, not only in Russia but also in England.

The correlative conjunctions 'not only ... but also ...' should be used together when presenting two examples. 'But also' completes the first part of the comparison.