Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question more naturally by saying “Yes, I did” rather than “Yes, I had.” Use the more natural phrase “ride my bike” instead of “go around by bicycle,” and avoid vague expressions such as “or something.” You can improve the structure by giving a direct answer, one or two specific examples, and a brief present-day comment.

예시: Yes, I did. I often rode my bike around the neighborhood with my friends, especially when we went to the park or the local shops. I really enjoyed the freedom it gave me. I don’t have a bike now, but I’d like to buy one again in the future.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and explain your answer with accurate, specific language. Use “Most people have bikes” or “Many people ride bikes” instead of “Most of people have run.” The phrase “systems to land a bicycle” should be replaced with “bike-rental systems,” and “facilitate over sightseeing” is unnatural; say “make sightseeing easier.” Avoid repeating words such as “nearby.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people ride them for exercise, short trips, or sightseeing, and bike-sharing systems are available in many cities. These services make it easy to rent a bike and visit nearby attractions without dealing with traffic.

× Yes, I had.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question uses the auxiliary verb did, so the short affirmative answer should also use did. Had is the past form of have and does not correctly repeat the auxiliary structure of the question.

× And actually I'd love to go around by bicycle with my friends, for example, going to the park, going to the supermarket or some sweet shops or something.

✓ And actually, I loved going around by bicycle with my friends, for example, to the park, the supermarket, or some sweet shops.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the main verb should be in the past tense. Loved matches the past-time context better than would love. The destinations also take the preposition to.

× Most of people have run and but also there were many systems to land a bicycle and it may facilitate over sightseeing or just a short leisure to nearby nearby sights.

✓ Most people have bicycles, and there are also many systems for renting bicycles. These systems may make sightseeing or short trips to nearby sights more convenient.

Most is used directly before a plural noun when no article is present, so most people is correct, not most of people. The original sentence also combines several clauses incorrectly, so separating the ideas makes the sentence clearer and grammatically complete.

× Most of people have run and but also there were many systems to land a bicycle and it may facilitate over sightseeing or just a short leisure to nearby nearby sights.

✓ Most people have bicycles, and there are also many systems for renting bicycles. These systems may make sightseeing or short trips to nearby sights more convenient.

The student is describing the current situation in the country, so the present-tense form there are is needed instead of the past-tense form there were. The modal verb may is correctly followed by the base form make.

× Most of people have run and but also there were many systems to land a bicycle and it may facilitate over sightseeing or just a short leisure to nearby nearby sights.

✓ Most people have bicycles, and there are also many systems for renting bicycles. These systems may make sightseeing or short trips to nearby sights more convenient.

The preposition over is not used with sightseeing in this meaning. Use sightseeing without a preposition, or use make sightseeing more convenient. Also, to nearby sights correctly shows the destination of the trips.

× Most of people have run and but also there were many systems to land a bicycle and it may facilitate over sightseeing or just a short leisure to nearby nearby sights.

✓ Most people have bicycles, and there are also many systems for renting bicycles. These systems may make sightseeing or short trips to nearby sights more convenient.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined incorrectly, including and but also, and it does not have a clear grammatical structure. Use separate clauses with clear subjects and verbs. Avoid repeating nearby and organize the ideas in a logical order.