Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and use accurate, natural grammar. Say “I had a bike” rather than “I have said I had a bite,” and use the past tense consistently. Avoid repeating unclear phrases such as “red pesky” and “red pie scale”; describe the bicycle clearly, for example, by mentioning its color and whether it had training wheels. A clear two- or three-sentence answer with one specific detail would be more effective.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was about five years old. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and it was red with two small training wheels. I loved riding it around my neighborhood.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence first, such as “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.” Then support your opinion with logically linked reasons. Use natural collocations and grammar: “They are cheap and convenient,” “people use them to avoid traffic,” and “they can reach places that cars cannot.” Avoid repetition and connect your ideas with words such as “because,” “also,” and “as a result.”

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in crowded cities. They are affordable and convenient for short journeys, and people can use them to avoid traffic jams. In addition, bikes can reach narrow streets and other places that cars cannot access.

× I have said I had a bite when I was a child and actually it was it maybe five years old.

✓ I said I had a bike when I was a child. Actually, I was maybe five years old.

The question asks about a past experience, so the past-tense form said is more appropriate than the present perfect form have said. The phrase it was it maybe five years old incorrectly uses it as the subject; use I was five years old to describe the student's age.

× I have said I had a bite when I was a child and actually it was it maybe five years old.

✓ I said I had a bike when I was a child. Actually, I was maybe five years old.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined incorrectly, making the structure unclear. Divide the ideas into two complete sentences: one about having a bike and one about the student's age.

× My father gave me as a pretty present is a red pesky and with, uh, with two, it's a red pie scale.

✓ My father gave me a red bicycle as a present. It had two wheels.

Because the answer describes a past event, the description should use past-tense forms such as gave and had. The phrase is a red... should be changed to was a red... or, more naturally, the noun phrase can be placed directly after gave.

× My father gave me as a pretty present is a red pesky and with, uh, with two, it's a red pie scale.

✓ My father gave me a red bicycle as a present. It had two wheels.

A singular countable noun such as bicycle requires an article. Use a bicycle and a present. The original word order also separates the article from the noun, so the article must be placed directly before the noun.

× Shacks bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and can convenient for short journeys.

✓ Such bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short journeys.

Convenient is an adjective, so it should follow the linking verb are: are convenient. The form can convenient is incorrect because a modal verb must be followed by a base-form verb, and convenient is not a verb. In this context, simply use are convenient.

× People can use them to convenience to avoid the traffic areas and can be used there places where that car or places that car cannot be accessed.

✓ People can use them to avoid traffic, and they can be used in places where cars cannot go.

The preposition in is needed before places: used in places. The phrase avoid the traffic areas is not natural; use avoid traffic. The phrase cannot be accessed does not express the intended meaning clearly, so cannot go is more appropriate when talking about places that cars cannot reach.

× People can use them to convenience to avoid the traffic areas and can be used there places where that car or places that car cannot be accessed.

✓ People can use them to avoid traffic, and they can be used in places where cars cannot go.

Cars is plural because the sentence refers to cars generally, not to one specific car. Use the plural noun cars without the singular article a or the. Also, places should be followed by a plural noun when referring to places generally.

× People can use them to convenience to avoid the traffic areas and can be used there places where that car or places that car cannot be accessed.

✓ People can use them to avoid traffic, and they can be used in places where cars cannot go.

The pronoun they is needed as the subject of can be used because it refers to bikes. The original sentence omits this subject and uses unclear forms such as that car. Use they for bikes and cars for the general plural noun.