Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the examiner's question directly instead of repeating it. Use a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, I did” or “No, I didn’t,” and add one specific detail about the bike or how you used it. Avoid repeating the question because it does not provide any personal information.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike when I was about seven years old, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends.

제안: Answer the question directly by stating whether bikes are popular. “Adobe playback” is unclear and does not fit the topic, so use “cycling” or “biking” instead. Improve the grammar by saying “an efficient and low-cost means of transportation,” and connect your reasons with linking words such as “because” and “Moreover.” Add a specific example, such as people cycling to work or students riding to school.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who live in crowded cities. They are an efficient and low-cost means of transportation, and they also help people stay healthy. Moreover, cycling can reduce traffic and air pollution.

× Adobe playback is very important in my country because it is a very efficient and low cost and transportation style and it can also make our life very healthy.

✓ Bicycle riding is very popular in my country because it is an efficient, low-cost means of transportation, and it can also make our lives healthier.

The noun life should be plural because the sentence refers generally to the lives of people. Use lives after our. The correction also uses healthier because bicycle riding improves people’s health compared with their previous condition.

× Adobe playback is very important in my country because it is a very efficient and low cost and transportation style and it can also make our life very healthy.

✓ Bicycle riding is very popular in my country because it is an efficient, low-cost means of transportation, and it can also make our lives healthier.

Low-cost is a compound adjective modifying means, so it should be written with a hyphen. The phrase transportation style is not the appropriate expression here; means of transportation is the natural phrase. Also, popular answers the examiner’s question more directly than important.

× Adobe playback is very important in my country because it is a very efficient and low cost and transportation style and it can also make our life very healthy.

✓ Bicycle riding is very popular in my country because it is an efficient, low-cost means of transportation, and it can also make our lives healthier.

The original sentence contains an incorrect sequence of adjectives and nouns: very efficient and low cost and transportation style. Use a clear noun phrase, an efficient, low-cost means of transportation. Joining the two reasons with and also makes the sentence structure easier to follow.