Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly in the past tense because the question asks about your childhood. Avoid repetition, hesitation, and unfinished phrases. Use correct past-tense forms such as “had,” “bought,” and “was.” Also, use “excited” to describe your feeling and “surprised” only when something unexpected happens. Add one specific detail about the bike or how you used it.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was about eight, and I was really excited to receive it. It was a small blue bike, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Avoid repeating “I think” and “nowadays.” Use accurate expressions: “cycle to work,” not “call their works,” and “save time in traffic,” not “don’t waste your time in daytime in traffic jam.” Connect your reason with a linking word such as “because” and include a specific comparison or example.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many students and office workers cycle to school or work because it helps them avoid traffic jams and save money on transportation. In addition, some cities are building more bike lanes, which is encouraging even more people to ride.

× I have a bike in a childhood. My father buy me this bike, and when he buy this bike for me, I am very exciting.

✓ I had a bike in my childhood. My father bought this bike for me, and I was very excited.

The question asks about a past period, so the main verbs should be in the simple past: have becomes had, buy becomes bought, and am becomes was.

× I have a bike in a childhood.

✓ I had a bike in my childhood.

Use in with a period of life, and use the possessive determiner my before childhood. The phrase in a childhood is not appropriate here.

× I am very exciting. I am very surprising.

✓ I was very excited. I was very surprised.

Excited and surprised describe the student’s feelings, so the past-participle adjectives are needed. Exciting and surprising describe something that causes feelings, not the person who experiences them.

× Yes, yes, I have a bike in a in a childhood uh it my father buy me this bike and when he buy bought this bike for me, I am very exciting. I am and I am a very surprising.

✓ Yes, I had a bike in my childhood. My father bought it for me, and I was very excited and surprised.

The original response contains repeated words, incomplete structures, and an unclear pronoun reference. Use separate complete sentences with a subject and a correctly conjugated verb.

× I think nowadays in popular.

✓ I think bikes are popular nowadays.

For a general opinion about the present, use the present simple. The plural subject bikes requires the present-tense verb are before the adjective popular.

× Nowadays in popular.

✓ Bikes are popular nowadays.

The original phrase has no correctly formed verb. A complete sentence needs the subject bikes and the linking verb are.

× Many students and coworkers call their works with by bike in traffic jam.

✓ Many students and workers go to school or work by bike in traffic jams.

Use by bike to describe the means of transportation. The phrase with by bike is incorrect. Use in traffic jams rather than in traffic jam when referring generally to congested roads.

× In traffic jam.

✓ In traffic jams.

The speaker is referring to traffic congestion in general, so the countable noun jam should be plural after the plural idea of different traffic situations.

× They do not waste your time.

✓ They do not waste their time.

The subject is they, so the possessive determiner should be their. Your refers to the listener and does not match the subject.

× I think in I think nowadays in popular because in our city, many students and coworkers call their works with by bike because in they don't waste your time in daytime in traffic jam in nowadays in a popular.

✓ I think bikes are popular nowadays because many students and workers go to school or work by bike. They can save time in traffic jams.

The original response contains repeated clauses, missing verbs, incorrect word order, and several disconnected phrases. Divide the ideas into two complete sentences and connect them with because.