Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and use more natural grammar. Replace “when I was jad” with “when I was a child,” and say “I didn’t have a bike” rather than “I did not have any bike.” Avoid repeating “because”; use “as” or restructure the sentence. Also, use the past form “couldn’t afford one” because you are talking about your childhood.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn’t afford one at the time. We were facing some financial difficulties, so having a bike was not a priority for my family.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in India.” Avoid unnecessary words and correct the grammar in “use for to going their jobs” and “for their works.” Use “commute to work” instead. You can also distinguish between bicycles and motorbikes, since “bike” may refer to either one, and add one specific supporting detail.

예시: Yes, bikes, especially motorbikes, are very popular in India. They are relatively affordable and convenient for commuting to work, particularly in busy cities. Many people choose them because they use less fuel and can move through traffic more easily than cars.

× No, I did not have any bike when I was jad because my parents can't afford it because of some financial problem.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was young because my parents could not afford one due to a financial problem.

Use a bike, not any bike, when referring to one unspecified countable object in this affirmative-style statement. Use one instead of it to avoid repeating the noun bike. Also, jad appears to be a typing error; the correct word is young.

× No, I did not have any bike when I was jad because my parents can't afford it because of some financial problem.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was young because my parents could not afford one due to a financial problem.

The question asks about a situation in the past, so can afford must be changed to could afford. The past form could afford agrees with the past context.

× No, I did not have any bike when I was jad because my parents can't afford it because of some financial problem.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was young because my parents could not afford one due to a financial problem.

Using because twice in the same clause creates an awkward and incorrect structure. Use because to introduce the reason and due to to introduce the cause of the financial difficulty.

× No, I did not have any bike when I was jad because my parents can't afford it because of some financial problem.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was young because my parents could not afford one due to a financial problem.

Use the indefinite article a before singular countable nouns when mentioning one nonspecific item: a bike and a financial problem.

× Definitely yes bikes are more popular in India because people can easily afford a budget friendly bike and they usually use for to going their jobs and for their works on bike.

✓ Definitely. Bikes are popular in India because people can easily afford budget-friendly bikes, and they usually use them to go to work.

The generic plural noun bikes does not need an article. However, when speaking generally about bikes as a type of transport, budget-friendly bikes is more natural than a budget-friendly bike. The hyphen is also needed in the compound adjective budget-friendly.

× Definitely yes bikes are more popular in India because people can easily afford a budget friendly bike and they usually use for to going their jobs and for their works on bike.

✓ Definitely. Bikes are popular in India because people can easily afford budget-friendly bikes, and they usually use them to go to work.

The verb use needs a direct object. Since them refers to bikes, the sentence should say they usually use them.

× Definitely yes bikes are more popular in India because people can easily afford a budget friendly bike and they usually use for to going their jobs and for their works on bike.

✓ Definitely. Bikes are popular in India because people can easily afford budget-friendly bikes, and they usually use them to go to work.

After use something to, use the base form of the verb, not the -ing form. Therefore, use them to go is correct, not use them to going.

× Definitely yes bikes are more popular in India because people can easily afford a budget friendly bike and they usually use for to going their jobs and for their works on bike.

✓ Definitely. Bikes are popular in India because people can easily afford budget-friendly bikes, and they usually use them to go to work.

The correct structure is use something to go somewhere. Also, the natural expression is go to work, not go to their jobs or go for their works in this context. Avoid using for before to going.