Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly with “Yes, I did” and use the correct expressions “when I was a child” and “I needed a bike.” Avoid repeating words such as “from the” and explain the reason more naturally. You could add a specific detail about how you used the bike, such as riding it to school every day. Keep the answer to two or three clear sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I needed a bike because my home was quite far from school, so I rode it there every day. It was also a convenient way to get around my neighborhood.

제안: Give a clear reason that directly explains why bikes are popular. The phrase “as the economy increases” does not logically support your answer, and “choose different transportation” is vague. You could mention that bikes are affordable, convenient, environmentally friendly, or useful for avoiding traffic. Use a linking word such as “especially” or “for example” to add a specific supporting detail.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. They are affordable and convenient, and people can use them to avoid heavy traffic during rush hour. In addition, more people are choosing bikes because they are better for the environment.

× Yes, I had a back in my child because I need to go to school which needs bike and my home is far from the from school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because I needed it to go to school, and my home was far from school.

The question asks about the student’s childhood, so past-tense verbs are needed. Use needed instead of need and was instead of is when describing the situation in the past.

× Yes, I had a back in my child because I need to go to school which needs bike and my home is far from the from school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because I needed it to go to school, and my home was far from school.

Use when I was a child instead of in my child. Also, the phrase from the from school contains a repeated preposition. The natural expression is far from school.

× Yes, I had a back in my child because I need to go to school which needs bike and my home is far from the from school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because I needed it to go to school, and my home was far from school.

The singular countable noun bike needs the indefinite article a. However, school does not normally take an article in the expression go to school when referring to its usual purpose.

× Yes, I had a back in my child because I need to go to school which needs bike and my home is far from the from school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because I needed it to go to school, and my home was far from school.

The original sentence contains an unclear relative clause in which needs bike. A bike is needed by the student, not by the school. Reorganize the sentence by using because I needed it to go to school and connect the final idea with and.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because as the economy increases people always choose different transportation to work.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because, as the economy grows, people choose different means of transportation to get to work.

Because and as both introduce subordinate clauses, so using them together makes the relationship unnecessarily complicated. Use one conjunction for the main reason and separate the additional time or condition clause with commas. The structure because, as the economy grows, is clear and grammatical.