Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly at the beginning and use the correct past-tense form. Say “I didn’t have” instead of “I was not having,” and avoid confusing “bike” and “bicycle,” which generally have the same meaning. The phrase “above the one and 100 CC” is unclear; if you mean a motorcycle with an engine larger than 100 cc, state this directly. Also, “I would like that cycle was” should be replaced with “I thought a bicycle was.”

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I only rode a bicycle because I was too young to have a driving licence, and I wasn’t allowed to ride a motorcycle with an engine larger than 100 cc. Even so, cycling was one of the best ways for me to get around.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then explain why bikes are popular. Avoid repetition in “many of the boys young boys,” and use “young men” or “young people” if you are speaking generally. “The bike culture consists of the bikes of the company Harley” is unnatural; say “Harley-Davidson motorcycles are particularly popular.” Use linking words such as “especially” and “for example,” and mention a specific reason, such as status, freedom, or transportation.

예시: Yes, motorcycles are very popular in my country, especially among young men. Many people dream of owning a stylish or powerful bike because it represents freedom and status. For example, Harley-Davidson motorcycles and other luxury brands have a strong following, although many people also use ordinary bikes for commuting.

× when I was child

✓ when I was a child

The singular countable noun child requires the indefinite article a when referring to one child in general.

× I was not having bike

✓ I did not have a bike

The verb have describes possession, so the simple past form did not have is more appropriate than was not having. The noun bike also requires the article a.

× I was just having a bicycle

✓ I just had a bicycle

Because the question asks about the past, use the simple past had to describe possession. The continuous form was having is unnatural for this meaning.

× I was not having driving license

✓ I did not have a driving license

Driving license is a singular countable noun, so it needs the article a. The simple past form did not have is also required for past possession.

× the bike which is above the one and 100 CC

✓ the bike that was over 100 cc

The sentence describes a past situation, so use was rather than is. The natural expression for engine capacity is over 100 cc.

× Definitely I would like that cycle was on best transport for me when I was younger.

✓ I definitely felt that a bicycle was the best form of transport for me when I was younger.

The expression would like that is not suitable for expressing a past opinion. Use felt that instead. The sentence also needs the article a before bicycle and the article the before best.

× Many of the boys young boys their dream is to get a good bike

✓ Many young boys dream of getting a good bike.

The original sentence repeats boys and contains several clauses without a clear grammatical connection. Use Many young boys as the subject and dream of getting as the correct sentence structure.

× in my country there is a bike culture also a lot of famous things in it

✓ In my country, there is also a bike culture with many famous brands associated with it.

The original sentence joins separate ideas without a suitable conjunction or punctuation. Use with many famous brands associated with it to connect the additional information clearly.

× the bike culture consists of the bikes of the company Harley and many other expensive and luxury shops.

✓ The bike culture includes Harley-Davidson motorcycles and many other expensive and luxurious brands.

The original structure incorrectly uses shops to refer to motorcycle companies or brands. Includes is more natural here, and luxurious is the correct adjective form to describe brands.