Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly in a complete, well-punctuated structure. Use linking words such as “because” and “so” to connect your reasons and examples. “Rolled on morch” is unclear and should be replaced with “rode it on weekends” or “cycled there every weekend.” Avoid putting too many ideas into one sentence; two or three shorter sentences would sound more natural.

예시: Yes, I had a red bike with training wheels when I was a child. I loved riding it because it made me feel free. I often rode it to the park on weekends to play football with my friends.

제안: Begin with a clear answer and correct the vocabulary error: use “bikes,” not “bars,” and “my country,” not “my countries.” Explain the main reason, then provide one specific example. Use punctuation and linking words, such as “because,” “for example,” and “overall,” to make the response easier to follow. Finish the sentence instead of ending with “but let’s,” which makes the answer incomplete.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. They are affordable and convenient for short trips, so many students and office workers use them to travel to school or work. In addition, bike-sharing schemes have become common in several towns.

× Yes I had a bike when I was a child it was a red bike with training wheels and I liked it because it made me feel free and I could go to the park with my friends, for example, I rolled on morch every weekend to play football with the other kids.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a red bike with training wheels, and I liked it because it made me feel free. I could go to the park with my friends. For example, I rode it every weekend to play football with the other kids.

The original response joins several complete sentences without full stops, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into shorter sentences and use commas after introductory words such as 'Yes' and 'For example.'

× Well, I think bars are quite popular in cities in my countries because they are cheap and easy for short trips.

✓ Well, I think bikes are quite popular in cities in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips.

The question asks about one country, so the singular noun 'country' is needed instead of 'countries.' Also, 'bars' appears to be an incorrect word for the intended meaning, so it should be 'bikes.' 'Convenient for short trips' is the natural expression.

× So overall bikes are common in urban areas, but let's

✓ So overall, bikes are common in urban areas.

The phrase 'but let's' is unfinished and leaves the sentence incomplete. Either complete the clause after 'let's' or remove the unfinished phrase. A comma is also needed after the introductory phrase 'So overall.'