Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: This is a clear and natural answer with a direct response and a specific personal detail. To make it more effective, add one short sentence explaining how often you used the bike or how you felt about it. This would provide a little more development without making the answer too long.

예시: Yes, my dad bought me my first bike when I was five. It was pink and had butterflies on it, so I was absolutely delighted. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every weekend.

제안: You give a relevant comparison between large cities, the countryside, and suburbs, but the answer ends abruptly and does not clearly state your conclusion. Avoid the incorrect phrase “went to more to the countrysides”; say “went to the countryside” or “visited rural areas.” Also, “the countryside” is normally uncountable, and “So I would say not” should be replaced with “So I would say they are not very popular nationwide.” Use a linking word such as “however” to make the contrast clearer.

예시: I don’t think bikes are particularly popular nationwide. I live in a large city, where traffic and limited bike lanes make cycling inconvenient. However, bikes are probably more common in the countryside and suburbs, where there is less traffic and more open space.

× Well, I live in a large city so I don't often see people riding bikes around the city, but I think if we went to more to the countrysides or suburbs, we would see people using bikes more often.

✓ Well, I live in a large city, so I don't often see people riding bikes around the city, but I think that if we went to the countryside or the suburbs, we would see people using bikes more often.

Countryside is normally an uncountable noun when referring to rural land in general, so countrysides is incorrect here. Use the countryside instead. If you mean several rural regions, you could also say rural areas.

× Well, I live in a large city so I don't often see people riding bikes around the city, but I think if we went to more to the countrysides or suburbs, we would see people using bikes more often.

✓ Well, I live in a large city, so I don't often see people riding bikes around the city, but I think that if we went to the countryside or the suburbs, we would see people using bikes more often.

The phrase more to the countrysides contains an unnecessary second to and uses an unnatural structure. Say go to the countryside or go to the suburbs. You can use more often later in the sentence to express frequency.

× So I would say not.

✓ So I would say that bikes are not very popular in my country.

The original sentence is incomplete because say needs a complete clause after it. Add the subject bikes, the verb are, and the complement not very popular to express the intended meaning clearly.