Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly using the past tense because the question asks about your childhood. Avoid the confusing phrase “I do have a bike” and the repetition in “my brother.” Use a clear linking word such as “Whenever” or “Also” to connect your supporting details. Be careful with capitalization and phrasing: say “I remember that my brother and I rode along the riverside.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. Whenever my family went to the park at weekends, my brother and I would ride along the riverside. It was a wonderful memory because we enjoyed spending time outdoors together.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and then explain why bikes are popular. Correct the grammar in “the government has set up,” “rent bikes,” and “people who do not have a driver’s license.” Complete the final sentence by explaining how the rental system is convenient for you. Reduce fillers such as “uh” and avoid repeating “for.”

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. The government has set up a public bike-rental system, so people can rent bikes at one location and return them at another. This is especially convenient for people who do not have a driver’s license because they can travel short distances easily and cheaply.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike.

The question asks about the past, so the answer should also use the past tense. Use did have rather than do have when talking about owning a bike during childhood.

× I Remember Me and my brother rode along the Riverside.

✓ I remember that my brother and I rode along the riverside.

My brother and I is the subject of the clause, so the subject pronoun I must be used instead of the object pronoun me. Also, remember that introduces the clause more naturally.

× I Remember Me and my brother rode along the Riverside.

✓ I remember that my brother and I rode along the riverside.

The original sentence does not connect remember and the following clause correctly. Use remember that followed by a complete clause: my brother and I rode along the riverside.

× We also have a government setting up a public rental system for people to rent bike from one place to another.

✓ Our government has also set up a public rental system for people to rent bikes from one place to another.

The noun bike is used in a general plural meaning, so it should be bikes. Use the plural form when referring to bicycles in general.

× We also have a government setting up a public rental system for people to rent bike from one place to another.

✓ Our government has also set up a public rental system for people to rent bikes from one place to another.

The phrase a government setting up is awkward in this context. Our government has also set up clearly expresses that the government created the rental system.

× And for me, a person that don't have driver's license and it was very convenient for me to.

✓ As a person who does not have a driver's license, I find it very convenient.

The subject who refers to a singular person, so the verb must be does not have, not don't have. In formal speaking, does not is also clearer than don't.

× And for me, a person that don't have driver's license and it was very convenient for me to.

✓ As a person who does not have a driver's license, I find it very convenient.

The singular countable noun license needs the indefinite article a. The natural phrase is a driver's license.

× And for me, a person that don't have driver's license and it was very convenient for me to.

✓ As a person who does not have a driver's license, I find it very convenient.

The original sentence ends with the incomplete phrase convenient for me to and does not contain a completed main verb. Use I find it very convenient to form a complete sentence.

× And for me, a person that don't have driver's license and it was very convenient for me to.

✓ As a person who does not have a driver's license, I find it very convenient.

The original sentence contains several disconnected clauses. Begin with the introductory phrase As a person who does not have a driver's license and follow it with the complete main clause I find it very convenient.