Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, and avoid repeating words such as “I.” The phrase “I had my dad bought arrive for a bike” is grammatically incorrect; say “My dad bought me a bike.” Also, use the natural expressions “ride to school” and “hang out with my friends” instead of “ride to go to school” and “hang out with friends.” Add one specific detail to make the answer more developed, while keeping it within three or four sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad bought me one when I was about eight years old, and I used to ride it to school and hang out with my friends. It was quite a simple bike, but I really enjoyed using it.

제안: Begin with a clear answer and use accurate vocabulary: “bikes,” not “bias,” and “ride their bikes,” not “ride by.” Avoid repetition in “among children / Their children,” and use the correct phrase “go to school.” Your reason is relevant, but connect it more smoothly with a linking word such as “because.” Add a specific example or comparison to make the response more effective.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. Many children ride them to school or use them to meet their friends because bicycles are affordable and practical. In smaller towns, they are particularly common because they are a convenient way to get around.

× Yes, I had my dad bought arrive for a bike for me when I was a child and I I used to ride to go to school, hang out with friends.

✓ Yes, I had my dad buy a bike for me when I was a child, and I used to ride to school and hang out with friends.

The original sentence contains an incorrectly formed causative structure and several words in the wrong order. After had + person, use the base verb: had my dad buy, not had my dad bought. The unnecessary word arrive should be removed. Also, ride to school is the natural expression, and and is needed to connect the two activities.

× Yes, I had my dad bought arrive for a bike for me when I was a child and I I used to ride to go to school, hang out with friends.

✓ Yes, I had my dad buy a bike for me when I was a child, and I used to ride to school and hang out with friends.

The subject pronoun I is repeated in I I used. Use the pronoun only once: I used to. When two actions have the same subject, one subject pronoun can introduce both actions.

× Yes, bias are quite popular in my country among children Their children usually ride by to go school or to hang out with their friends because bikes are quite cheap and practical

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country among children. Children usually ride bikes to school or to hang out with their friends because bikes are quite cheap and practical.

The intended plural subject is bikes, so it must be written as bikes and used with the plural verb are. A period is also needed after children to separate the two sentences.

× Yes, bias are quite popular in my country among children Their children usually ride by to go school or to hang out with their friends because bikes are quite cheap and practical

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country among children. Children usually ride bikes to school or to hang out with their friends because bikes are quite cheap and practical.

Their is a possessive determiner and needs a noun that belongs to someone, such as their children. Here, the intended meaning is general, so use Children instead of Their children.

× Yes, bias are quite popular in my country among children Their children usually ride by to go school or to hang out with their friends because bikes are quite cheap and practical

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country among children. Children usually ride bikes to school or to hang out with their friends because bikes are quite cheap and practical.

The phrase go school is missing the preposition to. The correct expression is go to school. Also, ride bikes is the appropriate verb phrase; ride by does not express this meaning.