Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly at the beginning. Your response is difficult to understand because of unclear word choices, incorrect grammar, and disconnected ideas. Explain whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific details, such as who gave it to you, where you rode it, or why you liked it. Keep your answer to two or three clear sentences and use linking words such as “because” and “for example” accurately.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me one when I was about eight, and I usually rode it to school and around my neighborhood. I enjoyed it because it gave me more independence.

제안: State your opinion clearly, for example, “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Then explain where they are popular and why. Your answer contains several unclear phrases, such as “bicycles are quite complex,” and the reference to “Manitoba” does not clearly support your point. Use accurate vocabulary such as “urban areas,” “short distances,” “inexpensive,” and “convenient,” and finish with a complete sentence instead of stopping abruptly.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in cities and smaller towns. They are inexpensive and convenient for short trips, and they also help people avoid traffic. However, fewer people use them in areas with heavy rain or poor-quality bike lanes.

× But yes, I heard complain when I was sure there's always small buyers which any liked because it's very necessary and let me say where example to our school is called business brands and everybody.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I heard people complain that there were always small bikes, which everyone liked because they were very useful. For example, I rode my bike to school.

The original response contains several clauses joined without a clear grammatical structure. Because the question asks about the past, past forms such as had, were, and rode are needed. In a there-be construction, there were must be used before the plural noun bikes. The plural noun bikes also requires the plural pronoun they. Use short, complete sentences and connect ideas with clear conjunctions.

× very bicycles are quite complex in some parts of the country and not town because they are cheap and convenient for short trips for example Manitoba is used by that country and I sometimes try to try new market on

✓ Yes, bicycles are quite popular in some parts of the country, especially outside the towns, because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people in Manitoba use bicycles, and I sometimes try new bike routes.

The response needs a complete sentence with a clear subject and verb. The plural noun bicycles should not be preceded by very; the appropriate adjective is popular. The phrase in some parts of the country is correctly used for location, while outside the towns is needed to express the contrast with towns. Avoid repeating try to try; use try new bike routes instead. Begin the answer with a capital letter and organize the ideas into separate sentences.