Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and use consistent past tense. Replace unclear expressions such as “explore background” and “grab” with precise phrases like “explore the area” and “ride around.” Also, correct the grammar in “I goes” and “It makes me feel sense of freedom.” Use one or two specific details, such as where you rode the bike or what you did with your friends, and avoid fillers and repetition.

예시: Yes, I definitely had a bike when I was a child. It was a sturdy blue bike that I used to ride around my neighborhood. I often went cycling with my friends after school, and it gave me a wonderful sense of freedom.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Correct the grammar in “bike very popular” and “when it's come to.” Use “roads” instead of “roles,” and clarify the comparison between the countryside and cities. The answer is incomplete, so finish the idea and explain why cycling is less popular or less safe in cities. Reduce fillers and include a specific reason or example.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in rural areas. The roads there are usually wider and less crowded, so cycling is a convenient and safe way to travel. However, bicycles are less common in cities because of heavy traffic and the risk of accidents.

× When I was a child, I had a bike that's very sturdy.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike that was very sturdy.

The question asks about a past experience, so the verb in the relative clause should also be in the past tense. Use was instead of is because the bike was sturdy during the speaker's childhood.

× I use it to grab, to explore, umm, background, umm, around me and I, uh, goes with my friends.

✓ I used it to explore the area around me, and I went with my friends.

The answer describes past childhood activities, so use the past-tense verbs used and went. The corrected sentence also removes the incomplete and unclear verb sequence to create a grammatical sentence.

× I use it to grab, to explore, umm, background, umm, around me and I, uh, goes with my friends.

✓ I used it to explore the area around me, and I went with my friends.

The subject I must be followed by the base form or the correct past form of the verb, not the third-person form goes. In a past-tense answer, went is the correct form.

× It makes me feel sense of freedom.

✓ It gave me a sense of freedom.

Because the speaker is describing childhood, the past-tense verb gave is more appropriate than the present-tense verb makes.

× It makes me feel sense of freedom.

✓ It gave me a sense of freedom.

The singular countable noun sense needs the indefinite article a. The natural expression is give someone a sense of freedom.

× Yeah, actually, umm, bike very popular in my country, especially in the countryside.

✓ Yes, actually, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in the countryside.

When speaking about bikes in general, use the plural noun bikes. The plural subject agrees with the plural verb are.

× Yeah, actually, umm, bike very popular in my country, especially in the countryside.

✓ Yes, actually, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in the countryside.

The original sentence is missing the verb are. English sentences need a verb, and the structure for describing popularity is bikes are very popular.

× Yeah, actually, umm, bike very popular in my country, especially in the countryside.

✓ Yes, actually, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in the countryside.

The plural subject bikes must be followed by the plural form are, not a singular verb. Remember to check that the subject and verb match in number.

× The role is wide and easy to commute on the road.

✓ The roads are wide, and it is easy to commute by bike.

For the means of transportation, use by bike rather than on the road. Also, commute by bike clearly expresses how the person travels.

× When it's come to CD, it's very dangerous because we.

✓ When it comes to cities, cycling is very dangerous because of the heavy traffic.

The fixed expression is when it comes to. The subject it is third-person singular, so the present-tense verb must be comes, not come or come in the form it's come.

× When it's come to CD, it's very dangerous because we.

✓ When it comes to cities, cycling is very dangerous because of the heavy traffic.

The original sentence ends with an incomplete because-clause. A because-clause must be followed by a complete reason. Complete the idea by adding a clear subject and reason, such as cycling is dangerous because of the heavy traffic.