Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question more directly and avoid the contradiction between “I didn't know how to ride a bike” and “I can't ride a scooty.” Use “until I was an adult” instead of “till I was very adult,” and say “ride a scooter” rather than “ride a scooty” unless “scooty” is commonly used in your local context. Add one specific reason or brief personal detail to make the answer more complete. Keep the answer to two or three natural sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. In fact, I didn’t learn how to ride one until I was an adult because my parents were worried about my safety. I still prefer using a scooter, as it is more convenient for getting around my hometown.

제안: Begin with a clear answer such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular.” Use plural forms consistently: “young people,” “people in their thirties and forties,” and “scooters.” Replace unclear phrases such as “which may be their own interest” and “for like because” with a specific explanation. Improve coherence by using linking words such as “however” and “because,” and explain why scooters are more popular in your hometown.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people and adults in their thirties and forties. However, scooters are more common in my hometown because they are convenient, easy to operate, and practical for commuting. Many people choose them because they can travel through busy streets more easily.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child and till I was very adult I really didn't know how to ride a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, and until I was an adult, I really didn't know how to ride a bike.

Adult is used as a singular countable noun in this sentence, so it needs the indefinite article an. The phrase very adult is not grammatically appropriate here. Use be an adult or become an adult instead.

× Yeah, it's quite popular among the youngsters, but not only the youngsters.

✓ Yeah, bikes are quite popular among youngsters, but not only among youngsters.

The subject is bikes, which is plural, so the plural verb are is required instead of the singular form is. The pronoun it is also replaced with the plural noun bikes to make the subject clear.

× The people from 30s to 40 are riding a bike, which may be their own interest.

✓ People in their 30s and 40s ride bikes, which may be a personal interest of theirs.

When referring to age groups, use the plural forms 30s and 40s. Since people generally ride more than one type of bike, the plural noun bikes is more appropriate than the singular phrase a bike. The phrase a personal interest of theirs is also the correct noun structure.

× The people from 30s to 40 are riding a bike, which may be their own interest.

✓ People in their 30s and 40s ride bikes, which may be a personal interest of theirs.

Use in, not from, when referring to a person's age range. The natural expression is people in their 30s and 40s.

× But rather than bike, scooter is more famous in my hometown for like because it's convenient for both.

✓ However, rather than bikes, scooters are more popular in my hometown because they are convenient for both groups.

Singular countable nouns such as bike and scooter normally require articles, but the general comparison here is more natural with plural nouns: bikes and scooters. The pronoun they agrees with the plural subject scooters.

× But rather than bike, scooter is more famous in my hometown for like because it's convenient for both.

✓ However, rather than bikes, scooters are more popular in my hometown because they are convenient for both groups.

The expression for like does not form a meaningful grammatical structure, and the sentence contains several disconnected elements. Use a clear structure such as scooters are more popular because they are convenient for both groups. In addition, however is a more suitable connector at the beginning of this contrast.