Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same reason with two uses of “because.” Use a more natural structure such as “My parents didn’t allow me to ride one because they were concerned about my safety.” The answer is relevant and clear, but it could be slightly more concise.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents didn’t allow me to ride one because they were concerned about my safety.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence first, then add one or two specific reasons. Avoid repeating “because” and “ride a bike,” and use accurate expressions: people may use bikes as an alternative to public transport, but a bike is not itself public transport. Also, use “find” rather than “found” for a general opinion, and say “an easy way to travel” instead of “an easy way of driving.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. Many people use them as an alternative to public transport because they are affordable and convenient. They are also a good way to avoid traffic and stay healthy.

× Yes, definitely bikes are popular in my country because everyone wants to ride a bike because they found it very interesting they love to ride a bike because they want public transport and it is an easy way of driving.

✓ Yes, definitely, bikes are popular in my country because many people find them interesting and enjoy riding them. Bikes are also an easy way to travel, and some people use them instead of public transport.

The verb found is in the past tense, but the student is describing a general opinion and a current situation. The present-tense verb find is needed. Use the present tense for facts, habits, and opinions that are still true now.

× Yes, definitely bikes are popular in my country because everyone wants to ride a bike because they found it very interesting they love to ride a bike because they want public transport and it is an easy way of driving.

✓ Yes, definitely, bikes are popular in my country because many people find them interesting and enjoy riding them. Bikes are also an easy way to travel, and some people use them instead of public transport.

The original answer is a run-on sentence containing several ideas joined without appropriate punctuation or clear connectors. Divide long answers into shorter sentences and use conjunctions such as and, because, and so to show the relationship between ideas clearly. Also, avoid repeating because several times in the same sentence.