Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and use the past tense consistently because you are talking about childhood. Replace “I have a buy” with “I had a bike,” and “I ride” with “I rode.” Also, avoid redundancy such as “love and enjoy it very much.” Use a linking word such as “because” to introduce a specific supporting detail, such as where you rode the bike or who you rode with.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was four years old. I rode it almost every day because I really enjoyed cycling around my neighborhood. Sometimes, I rode it with my friends after school.

제안: Give a clearer topic sentence by saying, “No, bikes aren’t very popular in Thailand.” Use the plural forms “bicycle lanes,” “motorcycles,” and “cars,” and say “most Thai people” rather than “mostly Thai people.” You could make the answer more specific by explaining that hot weather, traffic, and limited cycling infrastructure encourage people to use motorbikes and cars instead.

예시: No, bikes aren’t very popular in Thailand. Most people prefer using motorcycles or cars because the weather is hot and many roads do not have safe bicycle lanes. As a result, cycling is mainly popular for exercise or short trips in parks and residential areas.

× Yes, I have a buy when I was four years old and remember that I ride the bike every single day because I love and enjoy it very much.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was four years old, and I remember that I rode it every single day because I loved and enjoyed it very much.

The question asks about a past situation, so the past tense should be used for events that happened when the student was four years old. Use had instead of have and rode instead of ride. Loved and enjoyed are also suitable when describing feelings at that time. Note that buy should be bike because bike is the intended noun.

× Bikes are not really much popular in Thailand because we don't have a bicycle lane and mostly Thai people use motorcycle and cars more often.

✓ Bikes are not very popular in Thailand because we do not have many bicycle lanes, and Thai people mostly use motorcycles and cars instead.

Much is not normally used before the adjective popular in this sentence. Use very to modify popular: not very popular. Also, mostly should be placed before the verb phrase: Thai people mostly use. The word instead clearly shows the contrast between using bikes and using motorcycles and cars.

× Bikes are not really much popular in Thailand because we don't have a bicycle lane and mostly Thai people use motorcycle and cars more often.

✓ Bikes are not really popular in Thailand because we do not have bicycle lanes, and Thai people mostly use motorcycles and cars instead.

Motorcycle should be plural because the sentence refers generally to the type of vehicle Thai people use. Use motorcycles, just as cars is plural. Bicycle lanes can also be plural when referring generally to the lack of cycling infrastructure in the country.