Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời có ý chính phù hợp nhưng mắc nhiều lỗi về từ vựng, ngữ pháp và độ tự nhiên. Cụm “when was a try” và “when I was a dry” có vẻ là lỗi phát âm/nhận diện từ, nên thay bằng “when I was a child”. Không nên dùng lặp “automatic automatically”; chỉ cần nói “it was an automatic motorbike”. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp ngay từ đầu, sau đó thêm một lý do hoặc cảm nhận cụ thể. Câu trả lời cũng nên dùng quá khứ nhất quán vì đang nói về thời thơ ấu.

예시: Yes, I had a small automatic motorbike when I was a child. It was not exactly a bicycle, but I really enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood. I felt very cool because not many children had one at that time.

제안: Câu trả lời có quan điểm rõ ràng và có lý do, nhưng một số cấu trúc chưa tự nhiên. Thay “people like automatically think” bằng “many people think”, “too tired” bằng “too tiring”, và “people who have works or study” bằng “people who work or study”. “People like motorbike” cần sửa thành “people prefer motorbikes”. Nên sử dụng từ nối tự nhiên như “because” và “as a result”, đồng thời đưa thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về sự tiện lợi hoặc khoảng cách di chuyển.

예시: No, I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country. Many people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting to work or school. As a result, bicycles are mainly used for exercise or short trips.

× As far as I remember when was a try, I had a bike, but it's like a motorbike rather than a bike because it's automatic automatically and at that time when I was a dry I felt like very cool.

✓ As far as I remember, when I was a child, I had a bike, but it was more like a motorbike than a bicycle because it was automatic. At that time, I felt very cool.

The original answer contains several clauses joined awkwardly without clear punctuation or structure. Use a comma after the introductory phrase and separate the long sentence into two sentences. This makes the answer easier to understand and more natural.

× As far as I remember when was a try, I had a bike, but it's like a motorbike rather than a bike because it's automatic automatically and at that time when I was a dry I felt like very cool.

✓ As far as I remember, when I was a child, I had a bike, but it was more like a motorbike than a bicycle because it was automatic. At that time, I felt very cool.

The question asks about the student’s childhood, so the past tense is needed. Use was instead of is and felt instead of feel when describing a past experience.

× As far as I remember when was a try, I had a bike, but it's like a motorbike rather than a bike because it's automatic automatically and at that time when I was a dry I felt like very cool.

✓ As far as I remember, when I was a child, I had a bike, but it was more like a motorbike than a bicycle because it was automatic. At that time, I felt very cool.

Automatic is an adjective, so it should not be followed by the adverb automatically in this sentence. Also, feel is followed directly by an adjective, so say felt very cool, not felt like very cool. Remember to use adjectives after linking verbs such as be and feel.

× Uh, I don't think so, because people like automatically think riding a bicycle is too tired with people who have works or study. So people like motorbike rather than bicycle.

✓ I do not think so because people generally think that riding a bicycle is too tiring for people who work or study. People prefer motorbikes to bicycles.

Tired describes a person’s feeling, while tiring describes something that causes tiredness. Therefore, riding a bicycle is too tiring. Use tiring when describing an activity or experience.

× Uh, I don't think so, because people like automatically think riding a bicycle is too tired with people who have works or study. So people like motorbike rather than bicycle.

✓ I do not think so because people generally think that riding a bicycle is too tiring for people who work or study. People prefer motorbikes to bicycles.

The preposition with is incorrect in this context. Use for to show the people affected by the activity: too tiring for people who work or study.

× Uh, I don't think so, because people like automatically think riding a bicycle is too tired with people who have works or study. So people like motorbike rather than bicycle.

✓ I do not think so because people generally think that riding a bicycle is too tiring for people who work or study. People prefer motorbikes to bicycles.

After the plural subject people, use the base forms work and study. Do not use works after people. The relative clause should therefore be people who work or study.

× Uh, I don't think so, because people like automatically think riding a bicycle is too tired with people who have works or study. So people like motorbike rather than bicycle.

✓ I do not think so because people generally think that riding a bicycle is too tiring for people who work or study. People prefer motorbikes to bicycles.

The answer discusses motorbikes and bicycles in general, so plural nouns are more appropriate: motorbikes and bicycles. Use plural forms when making a general comparison between types of vehicles.