Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and avoid unnecessary repetition, such as “Yes, I did have” and “birthday present” followed by “birthday gift.” Use more natural collocations, such as “I received it for my birthday,” “I had difficulty learning to ride it,” and “I switched to using a scooter.” The answer has a clear contrast with “However,” but “Therefore” is slightly too formal for a simple personal story. You could also explain briefly why you preferred the scooter.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I received it for my birthday. It was pink and decorated with princess ornaments, so I loved its appearance. However, I found it difficult to ride and had to use training wheels. As a result, I eventually switched to a scooter because it was easier for me to control.

제안: State your opinion more naturally by saying “I don’t think bicycles are very popular in Malaysia.” Avoid repetition in “there are there are,” and replace “very non bike friendly roads” with “roads that are not very bicycle-friendly.” The phrase “bicycle roads” is unclear; use “dedicated bike lanes” or “cycling paths.” Add a specific reason, such as the hot weather, heavy traffic, or safety concerns, and then explain that the government is trying to improve the situation.

예시: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in Malaysia. In many areas, the roads are not very bicycle-friendly because of heavy traffic and the hot weather, so I rarely see people cycling to work or school. However, the government has started building dedicated bike lanes along some major roads. These lanes may encourage more people to cycle in the future.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, I got it for my birthday present.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I got it as a birthday present.

The original sentence joins two complete sentences with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Use a full stop, semicolon, or conjunction to connect them correctly.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, I got it for my birthday present.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I got it as a birthday present.

Use as to describe the role or purpose of something. The natural expression is got it as a birthday present, not got it for my birthday present.

× However, I struggled riding the bike a lot and I had to use training wheels.

✓ However, I struggled to ride the bike and had to use training wheels.

After struggle, the infinitive form struggle to ride is more appropriate and natural in this sentence. The phrase struggled riding is not the best structure here.

× Therefore, I resorted to using a scooter, which I also got from my birthday gift.

✓ Therefore, I resorted to using a scooter, which I also got as a birthday gift.

Use as to indicate that the scooter was received in the form of a gift. From my birthday gift incorrectly treats birthday gift as the source rather than the role of the scooter.

× I do not think bicycles are popular in my country which is Malaysia.

✓ I do not think bicycles are popular in my country, Malaysia.

The country name is an appositive that renames my country, so it should be separated with a comma. This makes the sentence structure clearer.

× I seldom see people riding bikes on the roads since we have very non bike friendly roads.

✓ I seldom see people riding bikes on the roads because our roads are not very bike-friendly.

Bike-friendly is a compound adjective and needs a hyphen. The revised structure, not very bike-friendly, is also more natural than very non bike friendly.

× However, there are there are bicycle roads that the government has placed on bigger roads to make it safer for bicyclists.

✓ However, there are bicycle lanes on major roads that the government has built to make cycling safer for bicyclists.

There are is unnecessarily repeated, which makes the sentence ungrammatical. Also, bicycle lanes are built on or along roads rather than placed on roads. Avoid repetition and use a clear relative clause.

× However, there are there are bicycle roads that the government has placed on bigger roads to make it safer for bicyclists.

✓ However, there are bicycle lanes on major roads that the government has built to make cycling safer for bicyclists.

The pronoun it does not have a clear grammatical referent in the original sentence. Use the gerund phrase cycling as the subject of safer, which clearly expresses what is being made safer.