Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答内容具体，有时间、人物和感受，结构也比较清晰。主要问题是语法和搭配：应说“riding a bike”，而不是“riding bike”；“my dad told me”意思不完整，可以改为“my dad encouraged me”或“my dad taught me how to ride it”。此外，在连接两个较长的部分时，可以使用“although”或“but”使表达更自然。

예시: Yes, my dad bought me a mountain bike when I was five, and it was the first bike I had ever ridden. I felt excited but also a little scared at first. However, my dad encouraged me and taught me how to ride it, so I soon became confident. I ended up riding it almost every day.

제안: 回答观点明确，也提供了学生通勤、避开交通和环保等具体理由。不过有明显的重复和口误：“it helps me help them”应改为“it helps them”，“but over bikes”应改为“moreover, bikes”或“also, bikes”。建议将多个理由分成更清晰的句子，并使用“because”和“also”连接，避免一个句子过长。

예시: Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country, especially among students and office workers. Many people cycle to school or work because it is an affordable and efficient way to travel, and it helps them avoid traffic during rush hour. Moreover, bikes are environmentally friendly and convenient for short trips around the city.

× Yes, my dad bought me a mountain bike when I was five years old and that was my first time riding bike.

✓ Yes, my dad bought me a mountain bike when I was five years old, and that was my first time riding a bike.

可数名词 bike 前面需要冠词。这里指一辆自行车，因此应使用不定冠词 a。表达“第一次骑自行车”时，应说 riding a bike。

× I remember feeling excited and a little bit scared at first but my dad told me and I rode it almost every day.

✓ I remember feeling excited and a little bit scared at first, but my dad told me how to ride it, and I rode it almost every day.

动词 tell 后面通常需要说明“告诉某人什么内容”。原句中的 told me 后缺少具体内容，导致句子结构不完整。可以使用 told me how to ride it，表示“告诉我如何骑它”。

× Many students ride bikes to school every day because cycling is a cheap and efficient means of transport and it helps me help them avoid traffic during rush hours, but over bikes are environmentally friendly and very common for short trips in my city.

✓ Many students ride bikes to school every day because cycling is a cheap and efficient means of transport, and it helps them avoid traffic during rush hours.

这里的 it 指代 cycling，而真正受到帮助的是 many students，因此应使用宾格代词 them。原句的 helps me help them 意思变成“它帮助我帮助他们”，与语境不符。应直接说 helps them avoid traffic。

× Many students ride bikes to school every day because cycling is a cheap and efficient means of transport and it helps me help them avoid traffic during rush hours, but over bikes are environmentally friendly and very common for short trips in my city.

✓ Many students ride bikes to school every day because cycling is a cheap and efficient means of transport, and it helps them avoid traffic during rush hours. Moreover, bikes are environmentally friendly and very common for short trips in my city.

but 表示转折，但前后内容并没有明显的转折关系。这里是在补充自行车的另一个优点，所以应使用 Moreover（此外）或 In addition（另外）。同时，over 不能用于表达“此外”。