Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời có ý chính và một chi tiết cụ thể về món quà, nhưng mắc nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên. Hãy dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán: “had”, “was”, “gave”; tránh lặp chủ ngữ như “my parents, they” và tránh lặp từ “I” hoặc “still”. Cụm “write a transport” không đúng ngữ cảnh; nên nói “ride a bike for the first time”. Câu trả lời cũng cần một câu kết quả hoặc cảm xúc rõ ràng để tạo cấu trúc mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me as a birthday present when I was four years old. I was really excited because it was my first time riding a bike. I still remember how happy I felt when I learned to ride it.

제안: Bạn trả lời đúng hướng và đưa ra hai lý do cụ thể: tập thể dục và bảo vệ môi trường. Tuy nhiên, có nhiều lỗi từ vựng, ngữ pháp và phát âm/nhận diện từ như “bite/by” thay cho “bike”, “a environmental” thay cho “an environmental”, và “people they use” thay cho “people use”. Hãy mở đầu trực tiếp bằng “Yes, bikes are quite popular...” rồi dùng từ nối như “especially” và “Moreover” để liên kết các ý. Cần diễn đạt rõ hơn rằng người lớn tuổi dùng xe đạp để tập thể dục, còn học sinh và người đi làm dùng xe đạp để di chuyển.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among older people and students. Many elderly people ride bikes for exercise because cycling is good for their health. Moreover, some students and office workers use bicycles to commute because they are affordable and environmentally friendly.

× Well, I have a bike when I were a child.

✓ Well, I had a bike when I was a child.

The question refers to a past period, so use the past form had instead of have. The verb be must also be in the past form was after I.

× This is a present that my parents, they gave to me when I was four years old.

✓ This was a present that my parents gave me when I was four years old.

My parents is already the subject of the relative clause, so the extra pronoun they is unnecessary. Avoid repeating the subject in the same clause.

× This is a present that my parents, they gave to me when I was four years old.

✓ This was a present that my parents gave me when I was four years old.

The student is describing a gift received in the past, so use was rather than is. Keep the past-tense verb gave for the completed past action.

× And at the moment I remember that I felt so happy because the first time I, I, I tried to write a transport and I still remember it still nowadays.

✓ I remember feeling very happy because it was the first time I had tried to ride a bike, and I still remember it.

The original sentence has an incomplete because-clause and several ideas joined awkwardly. Use it was the first time to introduce the experience clearly, and connect the ideas with a complete sentence structure.

× And at the moment I remember that I felt so happy because the first time I, I, I tried to write a transport and I still remember it still nowadays.

✓ I remember feeling very happy because it was the first time I had tried to ride a bike, and I still remember it nowadays.

Still and nowadays express similar time meanings, so using still before remember is more natural. Do not repeat still at the end of the sentence.

× Well, I think that bikes are quite popular in my country that, uh, a lot of people stay, uh, is bite for a health purpose, like elderly.

✓ Well, I think that bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for health purposes, especially the elderly.

That cannot introduce the reason in this sentence. Use because to connect the opinion with its reason.

× Well, I think that bikes are quite popular in my country that, uh, a lot of people stay, uh, is bite for a health purpose, like elderly.

✓ Well, I think that bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for health purposes, especially the elderly.

The plural subject many people requires the plural verb use, not is. Make sure the verb agrees with the actual subject of the clause.

× They use by to exercise every day.

✓ They use bikes to exercise every day.

The noun should be plural because they refers to multiple people who use bikes in general. Use bikes when talking about this activity generally.

× They use by to exercise every day.

✓ They use bikes to exercise every day.

The correct structure is use something to do something. The word to introduces the purpose of using bikes.

× They use by to exercise every day or right now we are going to have a environmental, so many people they use by as a transport to go to work every day or go to school.

✓ They use bikes to exercise every day. In addition, because we are facing an environmental problem, many people use bikes as transportation to go to work or school.

Use an before a word beginning with a vowel sound, as in an environmental problem. The original phrase a environmental is incorrect, and the noun problem is needed to complete the meaning.

× Many people they use by as a transport to go to work every day or go to school.

✓ Many people use bikes as transportation to go to work or school.

Many people is already the subject, so the additional pronoun they is redundant. Use only one subject before the verb.

× Many people they use by as a transport to go to work every day or go to school.

✓ Many people use bikes as transportation to go to work or school.

When referring to bikes as a general means of transportation, use the plural form bikes. Also, work and school do not need repeated every day when the general meaning is clear.