Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly at the beginning: “No, I didn’t.” Use the past tense consistently because you are talking about childhood: “I didn’t have,” “my parents were,” and “my hobby was.” Also, use “hobby,” not “hubby,” and avoid fillers such as “umm umm.” The phrase “that kind of toys” should be changed to “those kinds of toys” or, more naturally, “a bike.” Add one specific reason or example to make the answer more developed and coherent.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Both of my parents worked full-time, so I usually stayed at home and spent my free time drawing, painting, or watching TV. As a result, I never learned how to ride a bike until I was older.

제안: Start with a more natural expression such as “Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in the Philippines.” Avoid the historically inaccurate and unnecessary claim that bikes were the main transportation hundreds or thousands of years ago. Use precise vocabulary and grammar: “children enjoy riding bikes” rather than “children are fond of having or biking.” Link your ideas clearly with expressions such as “This is because” and “In addition,” and provide specific examples of who uses bikes and why.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in the Philippines, especially among children and young adults. This is because cycling is an affordable way to travel and it is also a good form of exercise. In addition, many people ride bikes in their free time or use them to avoid heavy traffic.

× If I can recall, when I was young, I don't have that kind of toys or entertainment because umm umm.

✓ If I can recall, when I was young, I didn't have those kinds of toys or entertainment.

The sentence refers to a period in the past, so the past-tense form didn't have is needed instead of don't have. Use the simple past when describing something that was true during your childhood.

× If I can recall, when I was young, I don't have that kind of toys or entertainment because umm umm.

✓ If I can recall, when I was young, I didn't have those kinds of toys or entertainment.

That kind of must be followed by a singular noun, while those kinds of is followed by a plural noun. Because toys is plural, those kinds of toys is the correct form.

× My dad and mom are both working adults, so my hubby's way back then was just to stay at home, paint, draw and watch movies or TV.

✓ My dad and mom were both working adults, so my hobby back then was just to stay at home, paint, draw, and watch movies or TV.

The sentence describes your parents during your childhood, so were is more appropriate than are. The past-tense form keeps the time reference consistent.

× So I've never had a bike before.

✓ So I never had a bike.

The question asks about a completed period in the past, namely your childhood. Therefore, use the simple past never had rather than the present perfect I've never had.

× And it is also a way of exercise for everyone.

✓ And it is also a way to exercise for everyone.

When way is followed by a verb, use the infinitive with to: a way to exercise. You could also say It is also a form of exercise for everyone.