Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答结构清晰：先直接回答，再补充购买时间、父母的帮助和学习结果。主要问题是“when when”重复，应删除一个；“learned how to ride it independently”略显生硬，可以改为“eventually learned to ride it on my own”。还可以加入一个具体感受，使答案更生动，但注意控制在3—4句以内。

예시: Yes, I did. When I was four or five, my parents bought me a small bike and taught me how to ride it. After practising several times, I eventually learned to ride it on my own, and I felt really proud of myself.

제안: 回答直接，也提到了共享单车这一具体原因，但代词和搭配需要改进：“shared bikes”是复数，后面应使用“them”而不是“it”；“with the presence of”不够自然，可改为“especially because of the popularity of shared bikes”；“convenient for adults to work”表达不准确，应改为“convenient for adults to commute to work”。建议使用“because”或“so”连接原因和结果，并补充一个具体场景。

예시: Yes, definitely, especially because shared bikes have become very popular in cities. People can easily find them near subway stations and use them for short journeys or to commute to work. They are convenient, affordable, and also help reduce traffic congestion.

× Yes, I did, when when I was four or five, my parents bought me a little bike and taught me to ride on it. I tried several times and finally I learned how to ride it independently.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was four or five, my parents bought me a little bike and taught me to ride it. I tried several times and finally learned how to ride it independently.

原句中“Yes, I did”后面不应直接用逗号连接后面的时间状语从句和主句，句子结构不清晰；同时“when”重复了一次。可以在“Yes, I did”后使用句号，并将“When I was four or five”作为新的时间状语从句。表达“学习如何骑车”时，常用“learned how to ride it”。

× People can use it everywhere in the city and ride it to commute.

✓ People can use them everywhere in the city and ride them to commute.

“shared bikes”是复数名词，因此后面的代词应使用复数形式“them”，不能使用单数形式“it”。代词必须与所指代的名词在数上保持一致：单数用“it”，复数用“them”。