Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and organize your ideas into no more than three or four sentences. Correct the unclear expression “soothi,” use the article in “a middle-class background” and “a bike,” and avoid repeating “go.” Also, “bike” and “cycle” usually refer to the same thing, so explain clearly what type of transport you used instead. Use linking words such as “because,” “instead,” and “for example” to connect your reason and supporting details.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. Instead, I usually walked to school or occasionally borrowed a friend’s bike. I also used public transport when I needed to go somewhere farther away.

제안: Give a clear reason for your opinion instead of using the vague phrase “due to the people.” Avoid the unnatural opening “Talking about a bike in this modernized world” and use more precise vocabulary, such as “commute,” “avoid traffic,” and “an affordable means of transport.” Add a specific example or comparison to make your answer more effective, and remember to use “most people” rather than “most of the people” in this context.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many people ride them to work or school because they are affordable and help them avoid traffic jams. For example, cycling is particularly common in the morning, when the roads are usually very busy.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family was from middle class background soothi could not afford bike for me I used to use my cycle to go school in sometimes in a friend house or go anywhere.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family was from a middle-class background, so I could not afford a bike. I used to use my bicycle to go to school, sometimes to a friend's house, or anywhere else.

The singular countable nouns background and bike need articles. Use a before middle-class background and a bike because they refer to one nonspecific item. The phrase a friend's house also requires the possessive form friend's.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family was from middle class background soothi could not afford bike for me I used to use my cycle to go school in sometimes in a friend house or go anywhere.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family was from a middle-class background, so I could not afford a bike. I used to use my bicycle to go to school, sometimes to a friend's house, or anywhere else.

The correct preposition after go when referring to a destination is to: go to school and go to a friend's house. In is not appropriate in these expressions. Also, sometimes is an adverb and does not need the preposition in.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family was from middle class background soothi could not afford bike for me I used to use my cycle to go school in sometimes in a friend house or go anywhere.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family was from a middle-class background, so I could not afford a bike. I used to use my bicycle to go to school, sometimes to a friend's house, or anywhere else.

The original answer contains several independent ideas joined together without appropriate punctuation or sentence boundaries. Divide the answer into two sentences and use so to connect the reason with the result. This makes the relationship between the ideas clear.

× Yes, of course bikes are popular in my country. Talking about a bike in this modernized world, most of the people use their bikes to go anywhere in the morning due to the people.

✓ Yes, of course, bikes are popular in my country. Speaking of bikes in this modern world, most people use their bikes to go anywhere in the morning.

Most people is the usual expression when making a general statement. The definite article the is unnecessary because people is being used generally, not to refer to a specific group.

× Yes, of course bikes are popular in my country. Talking about a bike in this modernized world, most of the people use their bikes to go anywhere in the morning due to the people.

✓ Yes, of course, bikes are popular in my country. Speaking of bikes in this modern world, most people use their bikes to go anywhere in the morning.

The phrase Talking about a bike creates an unclear introductory structure, and due to the people does not form a meaningful grammatical ending. Use Speaking of bikes to introduce the topic, and remove the unnecessary phrase at the end. Also, use bikes in the plural when discussing bicycles generally.