Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly in the past tense: say “Yes, I had a bike” instead of “I have a bike.” Avoid repeating the same idea, and clarify the age by saying “when I was six years old.” The final phrase is unclear, so describe a specific memory, such as learning to ride, falling off, or riding with friends. Use a linking word such as “because” or “and” to connect your supporting detail naturally.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was six years old, and I remember learning to ride it in front of our house. I fell a few times, but I really enjoyed using it.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then support it with specific examples. The phrases “it’s I see,” “unload,” and “some people ride bicycle” are grammatically incorrect or unclear; use “I often see people riding bicycles” and “some people ride them for exercise.” Improve coherence by using a linking word such as “for example” or “also,” and mention where people ride, such as in parks, on bike paths, or around residential areas.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. I often see people riding them in parks and along dedicated bike paths, especially at weekends. Many people use bicycles for exercise, while others ride them because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about a situation in your childhood, so the past tense had is required instead of the present tense have.

× My father bought it for me when I was around 6:00.

✓ My father bought it for me when I was around six years old.

When talking about a person's age, use the structure was around six years old. The expression 6:00 refers to a time of day, not an age.

× I remember that I I read scratch.

✓ I remember that I scratched it.

The event happened in the past, so scratched is needed. The repeated pronoun I I must also be removed. Use scratched it to express the action clearly.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country and it's I see many people riding bikes unload and some people.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country. I see many people riding bikes outdoors, and some people ride bicycles for exercise.

The original sentence combines incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses. Separate the ideas into two sentences and use a complete clause with a subject and a verb. Outdoors is the correct adverb for describing where people ride.

× Ride bicycle for their exercise.

✓ Some people ride bicycles for exercise.

The plural subject people requires the plural noun bicycles when speaking about bicycles generally. Also, ride should follow the subject directly, and for exercise is the natural expression.