Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 質問に直接答えられており、具体的な年齢も含まれているため、自然で効果的な回答です。さらに内容を豊かにするには、その自転車の色や、どこで乗っていたか、どのように感じたかを1文追加するとよいでしょう。例えば、"I used to ride it around my neighborhood" のように、過去の習慣を表す表現を使うとより自然です。

예시: Yes, my father bought me a bike when I was eight years old. It was blue, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends. I really enjoyed the freedom it gave me.

제안: 最初の文は質問に直接答えていますが、"we usually commute by bike" は国全体についての一般化としてやや不自然で、具体的な説明も不足しています。また、"Sees. Junior high school or high school?" は意味が不明確で、回答の流れを妨げています。中高生が通学に使うのか、通勤・通学のどちらで人気なのかを明確にし、"For example" や "especially" などの linking words を使って具体例を加えましょう。

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who live near their workplaces. For example, many junior high and high school students cycle to school because it is convenient and inexpensive. However, fewer people use bikes in large cities because of heavy traffic.

× Sees. Junior high school or high school?

✓ Have you been commuting by bike since junior high school or high school?

The word Sees is not grammatically correct in this context, and the original question is missing a main verb. Use the present perfect continuous form have you been commuting to describe an activity that started in the past and continues now. Also, use since before the starting point of the activity.