Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly, then explain how you used the bike and why you stopped. Use more natural collocations: say “ride a bike” rather than “play a bike,” and “I was forced to ride it every day” rather than “I’m forced to do it every day.” Avoid repeated fillers such as “umm” and “the, the, the.” Also, clarify whether you stopped riding because you became bored or because someone made you ride every day.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it as a birthday present when I was ten, and I was really excited to ride it around my neighborhood. However, I gradually lost interest because my parents made me practise every day, so it started to feel like a chore.

제안: State your opinion clearly and support it with a specific reason and example. Use the plural form “bikes aren’t” when speaking generally, and replace “rake it” with “take it” or, more naturally, “choose them.” Improve the contrast by saying “Although bikes are environmentally friendly, many people prefer public transport because it is faster and more convenient.” Avoid fillers and repetition, and use “environmentally friendly” or “eco-friendly” with a hyphen.

예시: Not particularly. In Hong Kong, most people prioritise speed and convenience, so they usually take the MTR or buses instead of riding bikes. Although cycling is eco-friendly, it can be inconvenient because the city is crowded and there are relatively few dedicated bike lanes.

× I remember it was a birthday gift and somehow I stopped playing it after, umm, getting a little bored of, uh, the, the, the routine 'cause I'm forced to do it every day.

✓ I remember it was a birthday gift, and somehow I stopped playing it after getting a little bored of the routine because I was forced to do it every day.

The speaker is describing a past childhood experience, so the verb phrase I'm forced should be in the past tense: I was forced. Keep the tense consistent when describing events that happened in the past.

× So in Hong Kong people prioritise efficiency and obviously bike isn't the first choice that would pop up in your mind because it's, it's kind of slow, even though it is eco friendly, but we, we don't really want to rake it.

✓ So, in Hong Kong, people prioritise efficiency, and obviously a bike isn't the first choice that would pop up in your mind because it's kind of slow, even though it is eco-friendly, but we don't really want to rake it.

Bike is a singular countable noun, so it needs a determiner. The indefinite article a is appropriate when referring to a bike in general. Remember to use a or an before a singular countable noun when it is mentioned generally or for the first time.

× So in Hong Kong people prioritise efficiency and obviously bike isn't the first choice that would pop up in your mind because it's, it's kind of slow, even though it is eco friendly, but we, we don't really want to rake it.

✓ So, in Hong Kong, people prioritise efficiency, and obviously a bike isn't the first choice that would pop up in your mind because it's kind of slow. Even though it is eco-friendly, we don't really want to rake it.

Even though already introduces a contrast, so it should not be followed by but in the same clause. Use either even though or but, not both together. For example, say Even though it is slow, we do not want to use it, or It is slow, but we do not want to use it.