Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear topic sentence first, then add one or two specific details. Avoid joining too many ideas with repeated “and,” and do not restart or leave sentences unfinished. Use linking words such as “because,” “so,” and “also” to make the answer more coherent. You could explain what you learned to do on the bicycle and how often you rode it. Keep the answer to two or three complete sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought it for me, and I often rode it with my friends in the park near my home. We had a lot of fun, and I learned how to ride it without using training wheels.

제안: Answer the question directly and avoid fillers such as “uh” and the repetition of “bike bikes.” Use “bicycles” or “cycling” accurately, and organize your reasons with linking words. The answer is unfinished, so complete the explanation of why cycling is dangerous, for example by mentioning heavy traffic or a lack of bike lanes. Also, say “petrol prices are low” or “fuel is inexpensive” rather than “the gas price is low.”

예시: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country. Since petrol is relatively inexpensive, many people prefer to drive cars instead of cycling. In addition, cycling can be dangerous because the roads are crowded and there are not enough dedicated bike lanes.

× And I remember we learned. We learned.

✓ I remember that we learned how to ride bicycles.

The repeated phrase We learned is incomplete in this context because it does not state what was learned. Use a complete clause with an object or complement, such as how to ride bicycles. Avoid repeating the same unfinished phrase.

× Unfortunately, in my country, bike bikes are not very popular because the gas price is low and people like to have a car rather than a bicycle.

✓ Unfortunately, in my country, bikes are not very popular because gas prices are low and people prefer to have cars rather than bicycles.

Bike bikes contains an unnecessary repetition. Use the plural noun bikes because the sentence refers to bicycles in general. The nouns car and bicycle should also be plural when speaking about cars and bicycles in general.

× The gas price is low.

✓ Gas prices are low.

When referring generally to the cost of fuel, use the plural noun prices. Because prices is plural, it must be followed by the plural verb are.

× And also it's very dangerous because, uh.

✓ It is also very dangerous to ride a bicycle.

The word because introduces a dependent clause, but the sentence does not provide the reason after because. Either complete the clause, such as because there are many cars on the roads, or remove because and use a complete sentence. Also, avoid beginning this sentence with And also in a formal speaking response.