Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same sentence. Use the correct articles and prepositions: say “a bike” and “when I was a child.” Add one specific supporting detail, such as how often you used the bike or where you rode it.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood after school, and I really enjoyed spending time outdoors.

제안: Give a clear opinion at the beginning instead of using several hesitations and repeated phrases such as “I don’t know” and “in my opinion, I think.” Improve accuracy by saying “most people,” “use bikes,” and “for exercise or transportation.” Complete the final idea, and support your answer with a specific comparison or example. Also, avoid contradicting yourself by saying “all people” and then correcting it to “not all.”

예시: Yes, I think bikes are fairly popular in Iran, especially for exercise. Many people ride them in parks or on cycling paths, although they are not used as much as cars for daily transportation because some cities have heavy traffic and limited bike lanes.

× Yes, I had bike when a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The singular countable noun bike needs the indefinite article a. The phrase when a child is incomplete because it lacks a subject and verb; when I was a child is the complete expression.

× Yes, I had bike when a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The clause when a child does not contain a verb. Use when I was a child to include the subject I and the past-tense verb was.

× Honestly, I don't know, but in my opinion, I think umm, yes, bikes uh, are popular in my country, in Iran and all people, umm, not all, but uh, most of people uh, use bike for exercise or going to an.

✓ Honestly, I don't know, but in my opinion, I think, yes, bikes are popular in my country, Iran. Most people use bikes for exercise or transportation.

When referring to bicycles in general, use the plural form bikes rather than the singular form bike. The phrase going to an is unfinished, so transportation provides a complete and natural parallel purpose.

× Honestly, I don't know, but in my opinion, I think umm, yes, bikes uh, are popular in my country, in Iran and all people, umm, not all, but uh, most of people uh, use bike for exercise or going to an.

✓ Honestly, I don't know, but in my opinion, I think, yes, bikes are popular in my country, Iran. Most people use bikes for exercise or transportation.

Use most people when speaking about people in general. Most of people is not the correct general quantifier phrase; most of the people would require a specific group.

× Honestly, I don't know, but in my opinion, I think umm, yes, bikes uh, are popular in my country, in Iran and all people, umm, not all, but uh, most of people uh, use bike for exercise or going to an.

✓ Honestly, I don't know, but in my opinion, I think, yes, bikes are popular in my country, Iran. Most people use bikes for exercise or transportation.

The phrase going to an is incomplete because an must come before a singular countable noun beginning with a vowel sound. Replacing the unfinished phrase with transportation avoids the incomplete article phrase and makes the sentence grammatical.

× Honestly, I don't know, but in my opinion, I think umm, yes, bikes uh, are popular in my country, in Iran and all people, umm, not all, but uh, most of people uh, use bike for exercise or going to an.

✓ Honestly, I don't know, but in my opinion, I think, yes, bikes are popular in my country, Iran. Most people use bikes for exercise or transportation.

The original sentence contains several disconnected ideas and an unfinished ending. Separate the main opinion from the supporting statement into two complete sentences, and remove unnecessary repetitions such as in my country, in Iran and all people.