Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly in the past tense: say “Yes, I did.” Use “had,” “were,” and “would” consistently because you are describing childhood. Avoid fillers such as “umm,” “you know,” and “like,” and replace the unclear phrase “transportation for plane” with a specific explanation, such as riding to nearby places or school. Organize the response with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific details.

예시: Yes, I did. My siblings and I shared a bike when we were children, and we often rode it around our neighborhood. We used it to visit our friends and go to nearby shops, since we were too young to drive.

제안: Give a clear answer at the beginning and use the plural form “bikes” when discussing bicycles in general. Improve accuracy with phrases such as “most people use cars or motorcycles” and “motorcycles are faster than bikes for getting to a destination.” Use a linking word such as “because” to introduce your reason, and add a specific comparison or example to make the answer more developed. Avoid fillers and the awkward phrase “arrive in your destination.”

예시: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country, especially in large cities. Most people use cars or motorcycles because they are faster and more convenient for long journeys. However, bicycles are becoming more common in parks and among people who want to exercise.

× Yes, we do have a bike when I was a child and me and my siblings would umm, use it and go to our neighborhood.

✓ Yes, we had a bike when I was a child, and my siblings and I would use it to go around our neighborhood.

The question asks about a past time, so the past-tense verb had should be used instead of the present-tense form do have.

× Yes, we do have a bike when I was a child and me and my siblings would umm, use it and go to our neighborhood.

✓ Yes, we had a bike when I was a child, and my siblings and I would use it to go around our neighborhood.

When a pronoun is part of the subject, use the subject pronoun I, not the object pronoun me. Also, in standard English, my siblings and I is the appropriate subject phrase.

× Umm, we will be, you know, like we're like using it as our transportation for plane and umm.

✓ We used it as our means of transportation when we were children.

The phrase will be refers to the future, but the speaker is describing a past childhood experience. Use the past form used and the past form were instead.

× Umm, we will be, you know, like we're like using it as our transportation for plane and umm.

✓ We used it as our means of transportation when we were children.

The present-tense expression we're using does not match the past time described in the answer. Use the past-tense expression used when referring to childhood.

× Well I don't think it is popular since most of the people now are using umm car as a mode of transport or either the use motorcycle since it is faster to arrive in your destination than using bike.

✓ Well, I don't think they are popular, since most people now use cars or motorcycles as modes of transportation because these vehicles are faster than bicycles.

The question refers to bikes, which is plural. Therefore, use the plural pronoun they and the plural verb are instead of it and is.

× Well I don't think it is popular since most of the people now are using umm car as a mode of transport or either the use motorcycle since it is faster to arrive in your destination than using bike.

✓ Well, I don't think they are popular, since most people now use cars or motorcycles as modes of transportation because these vehicles are faster than bicycles.

Use a before a singular countable noun, as in a car, and use an article or a plural noun when referring to bikes in general. In this general statement, cars, motorcycles, and bicycles are the most natural choices.

× Well I don't think it is popular since most of the people now are using umm car as a mode of transport or either the use motorcycle since it is faster to arrive in your destination than using bike.

✓ Well, I don't think they are popular, since most people now use cars or motorcycles as modes of transportation because these vehicles are faster than bicycles.

The sentence discusses vehicles in general, so plural nouns are needed: cars, motorcycles, and bicycles. A plural subject also requires the plural form these vehicles are.

× Well I don't think it is popular since most of the people now are using umm car as a mode of transport or either the use motorcycle since it is faster to arrive in your destination than using bike.

✓ Well, I don't think they are popular, since most people now use cars or motorcycles as modes of transportation because these vehicles are faster than bicycles.

The combination or either the use is not grammatically parallel. Use or to connect the two alternatives directly: use cars or motorcycles.

× Well I don't think it is popular since most of the people now are using umm car as a mode of transport or either the use motorcycle since it is faster to arrive in your destination than using bike.

✓ Well, I don't think they are popular, since most people now use cars or motorcycles as modes of transportation because these vehicles are faster for reaching their destinations than bicycles.

The preposition in is incorrect with arrive when referring to a destination. Use arrive at a destination or, more naturally here, use the phrase reaching their destinations.

× Well I don't think it is popular since most of the people now are using umm car as a mode of transport or either the use motorcycle since it is faster to arrive in your destination than using bike.

✓ Well, I don't think they are popular, since most people now use cars or motorcycles as modes of transportation because these vehicles are faster than bicycles.

The comparison should compare vehicles with vehicles. These vehicles are faster than bicycles is a balanced comparison, whereas it is faster ... than using a bike compares a vehicle with an activity.