Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and use a clear topic sentence. Correct the grammar and word choice: say “I loved riding it to buy vegetables,” not “I love tiding it with vegetables.” Avoid repeating “purple” and “colour,” and make sure the sentence structure is complete. Add one specific detail about why you liked the bicycle, using a linking word such as “because.”

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was ten years old. It was a purple Hero bicycle, and I really loved riding it to the local market to buy vegetables. I enjoyed it because it gave me a sense of freedom and independence.

제안: Give a clear overall answer first, then explain how bicycle use changes with age. Avoid sentence fragments, repeated words, and inconsistent verb tenses such as “would ride” and “we all ride.” Use linking words such as “while,” “as,” and “for example” to connect your ideas. Be specific about who uses bicycles and mention your own experience in one concise sentence.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, although the type of bike people use often depends on their age. Young children usually ride bicycles, while older teenagers and adults often use motorbikes or scooters for commuting. For example, I had a scooter when I was in college, mainly because it was convenient and affordable.

× It was a Hiro Messindia bicycle which was purple in colour was my favourite color and I love tiding it with vegetables.

✓ It was a Hiro Messindia bicycle that was purple in color, and it was my favorite bicycle. I loved riding it with vegetables.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined incorrectly. The clause which was purple in colour was my favourite color does not have a correct structure. Use and it was to connect the ideas clearly, and separate the final idea into a new sentence.

× It was a Hiro Messindia bicycle which was purple in colour was my favourite color and I love tiding it with vegetables.

✓ It was a Hiro Messindia bicycle that was purple in color, and it was my favorite bicycle. I loved riding it with vegetables.

The answer describes a childhood experience in the past, so love should be changed to loved. Keep the verbs consistently in the past tense when discussing past experiences.

× It was a Hiro Messindia bicycle which was purple in colour was my favourite color and I love tiding it with vegetables.

✓ It was a Hiro Messindia bicycle that was purple in color, and it was my favorite bicycle. I loved riding it with vegetables.

The correct -ing form of ride is riding, not tiding. After loved, use the gerund form riding to describe the activity.

× So the young kids would ride the bicycle and as we grew older we all ride like a motorbike or a scooty and I had a scooty as well when I when I was in my college.

✓ The young kids would ride bicycles, and as we grew older, we all rode motorbikes or scooters. I had a scooter as well when I was in college.

When speaking about children and vehicles in general, use plural nouns: bicycles, motorbikes, and scooters. Singular forms with a or the refer to one specific item.

× So the young kids would ride the bicycle and as we grew older we all ride like a motorbike or a scooty and I had a scooty as well when I when I was in my college.

✓ The young kids would ride bicycles, and as we grew older, we all rode motorbikes or scooters. I had a scooter as well when I was in college.

The answer refers to past habits and past experiences. Therefore, ride should be changed to rode. The verb grew and the phrase had already show that the time reference is in the past.

× So the young kids would ride the bicycle and as we grew older we all ride like a motorbike or a scooty and I had a scooty as well when I when I was in my college.

✓ The young kids would ride bicycles, and as we grew older, we all rode motorbikes or scooters. I had a scooter as well when I was in college.

Ride like a motorbike incorrectly compares the way people ride with a vehicle. To express that people used motorbikes, say rode motorbikes or rode scooters.

× So the young kids would ride the bicycle and as we grew older we all ride like a motorbike or a scooty and I had a scooty as well when I when I was in my college.

✓ The young kids would ride bicycles, and as we grew older, we all rode motorbikes or scooters. I had a scooter as well when I was in college.

The original sentence is a long run-on sentence with too many ideas joined by and. Also, when I is repeated. Divide the ideas into two sentences and remove the repeated words.

× So the young kids would ride the bicycle and as we grew older we all ride like a motorbike or a scooty and I had a scooty as well when I when I was in my college.

✓ The young kids would ride bicycles, and as we grew older, we all rode motorbikes or scooters. I had a scooter as well when I was in college.

The phrase in my college is not the natural expression when referring to the period of being a college student. Use in college without an article or possessive determiner unless you mean a specific college building or institution.