Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly in the first sentence and avoid fillers such as “uh” and “because uh and uh,” which make the response less fluent. Use “parks,” not “perks,” and say “I used it to go to some parks” without an unnecessary pause or comma. Your answer includes a clear reason and personal feeling, but the ideas can be linked more naturally. For example, use “I enjoyed it because...” instead of repeating “This is because.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to nearby parks, where I enjoyed spending time outdoors. I especially liked cycling because I could feel the wind on my face, and it was both comfortable and relaxing.

제안: Give a direct opinion instead of saying “Yes, I agree with that,” because the examiner has asked for your view. Avoid fillers such as “MMM” and “uh,” and replace the unclear phrase “there are park, the land” with “there are many bicycle-parking areas.” Add a specific reason or example, such as people using bikes for commuting or shopping. Use linking words such as “also” or “for example” to connect your supporting details clearly.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Japan. Many people use them for short trips, such as commuting to the station or going shopping. In addition, bicycle-parking areas are common near train stations and along many streets, so cycling is convenient.

× This is because I can feel wind on my face and uh, it is really comfortable and relaxing.

✓ This was because I could feel the wind on my face, and it was really comfortable and relaxing.

The answer describes a past experience from the speaker's childhood, so the past tense should be used consistently: was and could feel instead of is and can feel. The phrase the wind is also more natural when referring to the wind felt on the speaker's face.

× This is because I can feel wind on my face and uh, it is really comfortable and relaxing.

✓ This was because I could feel the wind on my face, and it was really comfortable and relaxing.

The definite article the is needed before wind because the speaker is referring to the specific wind that they felt on their face. When talking about a particular experience, use the before a specific noun.

× Then there are so many places to park the bicycles and uh, there are uh, park, uh, the land, uh, for the bicycle on the street.

✓ There are many places to park bicycles, and there are also bicycle parking areas on the streets.

After there are, a plural noun is required. Park and the land do not form a correct noun phrase in this sentence. Use a plural expression such as bicycle parking areas after there are. Also, bicycles is more natural than the bicycles when speaking about bicycles in general.