Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly in the past tense because the question refers to your childhood. Avoid unnatural phrases such as “I have it in my child experience” and “during my six year old.” Use a clear structure: answer the question, explain when or how you got the bike, and add one specific detail about using it. Also avoid repeating “during” and use “pollution” or “air pollution” correctly if discussing environmental benefits.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought it for me as a birthday present when I was six. I often rode it in the park near my home, and I really enjoyed learning how to ride it.

제안: Give a complete and direct answer, then support it with one or two specific reasons. Use “ride bicycles to work,” not “use bicycles to their works,” and say “reduce pollution” rather than “reduce the pollutions.” Avoid unfinished repetition, unnecessary filler such as “right?”, and vague expressions like “happen in the global.” You could mention a specific group of cyclists or explain another benefit, such as saving money or avoiding traffic.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many people ride them to work because they are cheaper than cars and help reduce air pollution. Cycling is also a convenient way to avoid heavy traffic during rush hour.

× Yes, I have it in my child experience where during my six year old my father bought me a new bicycle during my birthday celebration so that I use this bicycle to get around in the park

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child. When I was six years old, my father bought me a new bicycle for my birthday, so I used it to get around the park.

The expression describing age is six years old, not six year old, because years is plural after the number six. Also, pollution is generally uncountable, so it should not be made plural as pollutions.

× Yes, I have it in my child experience where during my six year old my father bought me a new bicycle during my birthday celebration so that I use this bicycle to get around in the park

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child. When I was six years old, my father bought me a new bicycle for my birthday, so I used it to get around the park.

The question asks about a past childhood experience, so past tense is needed. Use had instead of have and used instead of use. A useful improvement is to identify the time first, such as When I was six years old, and then describe the past events.

× Yes, I have it in my child experience where during my six year old my father bought me a new bicycle during my birthday celebration so that I use this bicycle to get around in the park

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child. When I was six years old, my father bought me a new bicycle for my birthday, so I used it to get around the park.

The preposition for is more appropriate with birthday in this context: for my birthday. The phrase when I was six years old is also correct for expressing age. To describe movement around a location, get around the park is more natural than get around in the park.

× Yes, I have it in my child experience where during my six year old my father bought me a new bicycle during my birthday celebration so that I use this bicycle to get around in the park

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child. When I was six years old, my father bought me a new bicycle for my birthday, so I used it to get around the park.

The original sentence is too long and contains the unclear structure where during my six year old. Use separate sentences and the clear pattern When I was six years old, subject + verb. This makes the answer easier to understand.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because nowadays people are using bicycles to their works so that they can reduce the pollutions that happen in the global, right? So by these alternatives, they can reduce

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because nowadays people use bicycles to travel to work. This helps reduce pollution around the world.

Work is usually an uncountable noun when it means a place or activity, so use to work rather than to their works. Pollution is also normally uncountable in this meaning, so use pollution rather than pollutions.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because nowadays people are using bicycles to their works so that they can reduce the pollutions that happen in the global, right? So by these alternatives, they can reduce

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because nowadays people use bicycles to travel to work. This helps reduce pollution around the world.

The phrase to their works is incorrect. Use to work or to travel to work. The expression in the global is also incorrect; use around the world or globally. Practise common prepositional phrases such as go to work and around the world.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because nowadays people are using bicycles to their works so that they can reduce the pollutions that happen in the global, right? So by these alternatives, they can reduce

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because nowadays people use bicycles to travel to work. This helps reduce pollution globally.

Global is an adjective and cannot be used after the in the global in this sentence. Use the adverb globally, or use the noun phrase around the world. Choose an adverb when describing where or how something happens.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because nowadays people are using bicycles to their works so that they can reduce the pollutions that happen in the global, right? So by these alternatives, they can reduce

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because nowadays people use bicycles to travel to work. This helps reduce pollution around the world.

The final clause, So by these alternatives, they can reduce, is incomplete because reduce needs an object. Complete it with reduce pollution, or rewrite it as This helps reduce pollution. Avoid ending a sentence before the main idea is complete.