Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答直接，也提供了具体年龄和父母买自行车的细节，这是优点。但“riding bicycle”前应加冠词或使用复数，“improve my breathless”表达错误，应改为“improve my fitness/breathing”或“build up my stamina”；“encourage and courage”重复且不自然，可以改为“give me more confidence”。建议使用“because”或“so”连接原因和结果，并将句子控制得更简洁、自然。

예시: Definitely. When I was about six, my parents bought me a bicycle because they wanted me to become more active. Riding it helped me build up my stamina and gave me more confidence.

제안: 回答的观点明确，也提到了大城市、交通拥堵和环保意识，内容方向正确。不过答案在最后没有完成，严重影响连贯性和有效性；“there were so much traffic congestion”应改为“there is so much traffic congestion”或“there are so many traffic jams”，“People are supposed to ride bicycles”不如“People often ride bicycles”自然。建议补充环保意识提高这一完整原因，并使用“because”和“In addition”组织答案。

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular, especially in big cities, because there is so much traffic congestion. Many people cycle to avoid traffic jams and save time. In addition, growing environmental awareness has encouraged more people to choose bicycles instead of cars.

× When I was about 6 years old, my parents bought a bicycle for me and they asked me to start riding bicycle that will improve my breathless and encourage and courage.

✓ When I was about 6 years old, my parents bought a bicycle for me and asked me to start riding a bicycle. They said it would improve my breathing and encourage me to be more courageous.

可数名词 bicycle 表示“一辆自行车”时，前面需要使用冠词。第二次提到 bicycle 时应说 riding a bicycle，不能直接说 riding bicycle。

× When I was about 6 years old, my parents bought a bicycle for me and they asked me to start riding bicycle that will improve my breathless and encourage and courage.

✓ When I was about 6 years old, my parents bought a bicycle for me and asked me to start riding a bicycle. They said it would improve my breathing and encourage me to be more courageous.

breathless 是形容人“气喘吁吁的”，这里需要表达“改善呼吸”，所以应使用名词 breathing。encourage and courage 的词形和搭配都不正确，应改为 encourage me to be more courageous，表示“鼓励我变得更勇敢”。

× Definitely, especially in big cities because there were so much traffic congestion.

✓ Definitely, especially in big cities, because there is so much traffic congestion.

traffic congestion 是不可数名词，因此 there be 句型中应使用单数形式 is，而不能使用 were。由于这里谈论的是目前城市中的普遍情况，there is 更合适。

× Definitely, especially in big cities because there were so much traffic congestion.

✓ Definitely, especially in big cities, because there is so much traffic congestion.

问题询问自行车在国家中的普遍情况，属于一般事实，因此应使用一般现在时。were 是过去时，改为 is 可以表达当前城市交通拥堵的情况。

× In addition, environmental awareness in our country is

✓ In addition, environmental awareness in our country is increasing.

原句以 is 结尾，句意没有完整表达出来。系动词 is 后面需要补充表语或现在分词短语。这里使用 is increasing，表示“环保意识正在提高”，使句子结构完整。